A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
The recommendation as provided by the author seems quite relevant in certain scenarios that the nation should make a countrywide national curriculum for the students upto their higher secondary education which can help maintian continuity in the course curriculum which certainly could be used as a yardstick for admissions into universities which is quite successful for organization point of view. Moreover,this countrywide curriculum will certainly hinder the regional lingual and cultural heritage from burgeoning. So the recommendation needs to be reframed in a holistically manner to include provisions for exceptions which are lacking in the presently stated sentence.
As stated the nationwide curriculum will conspicuously lead to a feeling of unity in the society but at the same time due to such education the growing individuals may exhibit a relatively less tolerance to the difference of opinions which is one of the crucial aspect of a healthy society because the birth of influencial ideas often come from the well-balanced debates which incorporate the presence of various kinds of viewpoints on an issue.This policy may prove to be quite benficial in nations where the dictatorship is quite prevalent in order to condition the youth of the nation so that the chances of revolt from whithin the country can be systematically ruled out or in scenarios where the dictatorial rule wishes to keep the polpulation in illusion thereby exploiting them for labour and other skilled and unskilled jobs as is evident from the British Rule over various nations like India,Africa etc where they cunning exploited the native population for their benefit by manipulating the very education system of the country and introducing the relevent policies .
Moreover,the author do feel that the students are not grown enough or are not intellectually capable enough to make their own decisions as can be seen from the recommendation made if one views it as appropriately framed. Alas,it do assist the government to quantitatively mark the potential of the population due to the continuity in the curriculum and further exploit this quantitative aspect to appropriately utilise the population which is often seen in the autocratic rule like that of a Hitler in a way how he made the population to read his own biography "Mein Kamf" and persecuted anyone who has show disagreement with his views . Lastly, the nations which have a certain specific goal to achieve like that of Independence which when happened in India was a cumulative effort of the freedom fighters, poets and writers which helped to maintain this spirit of freedom ignited within the minds of the people.
So in concluding this analysis of the recommendation presented, I would suggest to look into the depth of the recommendation and try to incorporate the exceptions that may arise which will certainly strengthen the recommendation as put forth by the author.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, lastly, look, may, moreover, second, so, then, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2488.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 466.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33905579399 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18400661587 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525751072961 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 793.8 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.2370786517 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 58.0 23.0359550562 252% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 286.948356634 60.3974514979 475% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 311.0 118.986275619 261% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 58.25 23.4991977007 248% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.21951772744 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128436377947 0.243740707755 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0485170167102 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477994712902 0.0758088955206 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.070514352414 0.150359130593 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464905231096 0.0667264976115 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 32.8 14.1392134831 232% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 4.15 48.8420337079 8% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.92365168539 216% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 27.1 12.1743820225 223% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.58 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.05 8.38706741573 132% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 100.480337079 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 11.8971910112 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 25.2 11.2143820225 225% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 21.0 11.7820224719 178% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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