people's behavior is largely dependent by forces not their own making.
The statement states that what people do or act is mainly dependent on external forces not their own original thought. Indisputably, there are some people whose actions are largely of their own perception and thinking. Nevertheless, most of the time peoples deeds are usually reliant on outward drive. Thus, I generally agree with the opinion that peoples actions are chiefly dependent on exterior forces not on their own production.
First of all, person is defined by its behavior, whether he act as friendly or unfriendly; doings is what defines people. As we see nowadays all the people try to emulate the success of the person they admires most. They constantly try to achieve what other people have achieved. This type of feeling is mostly drive them to do things they are not intended to do. This type of mass following people is increasing day by day. To illustrate that, let's look at the example of students who don't know their ambition and follow the crowd and enroll in the courses they didn't want to do, and lost completely in their life.
Furthermore, this external force is not result of admiration than its the outcome of envious or jealousy. Today people are generally envy the other peoples success and they condemn themselves for not doing things which other people have did. This type of external feeling is helpful when it work in right direction, but mostly if people soon didn't realize their mistake than it will be great disaster for themselves. Some people in race of being rich they do some illegal things that will lead to instant success they admire, but after some time when they realize their mistakes they are too deep tangled in dirty mud from that they can not escape. This jealousy is very harmful if we didn't realized what we are doing.
Admittedly, There are some people who are self satisfied and they know what they want to achieve in their life. This type of people driven by their own thinking and their own passion. They constantly ask themselves that " Is this what they want?". They constantly making intended results as their motivation and that is work for them. This type of people completely different than what we defined earlier. However, the number of this people is very low, and the former is increasing largely.
In conclusion, although there are some self contended people whose actions are solely dependent on their own, but mostly there are external elements acting as chief driver in their actions. As long as there are envious and jealousy around in the world there will be external drive working in the driving wheel in person’s life. In fact, nowadays this type of vicarious feeling is growing day by day.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 61, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'acts'.
Suggestion: acts
... is defined by its behavior, whether he act as friendly or unfriendly; doings is wh...
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Line 3, column 123, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...riendly; doings is what defines people. As we see nowadays all the people try to e...
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Line 3, column 203, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'admire'
Suggestion: admire
... emulate the success of the person they admires most. They constantly try to achieve wh...
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Line 3, column 312, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'driven'.
Suggestion: driven
...chieved. This type of feeling is mostly drive them to do things they are not intended...
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Line 3, column 357, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... them to do things they are not intended to do. This type of mass following peopl...
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Line 3, column 488, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ets look at the example of students who dont know their ambition and follow the crow...
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Line 3, column 565, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...he crowd and enroll in the courses they didnt want to do, and lost completely in thei...
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Line 5, column 67, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... force is not result of admiration than its the outcome of envious or jealousy. Tod...
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Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...day people are generally envy the other peoples success and they condemn themselves for...
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Line 5, column 238, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'done'.
Suggestion: done
...ot doing things which other people have did. This type of external feeling is helpf...
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Line 5, column 292, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'works'?
Suggestion: works
... of external feeling is helpful when it work in right direction, but mostly if peopl...
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Line 5, column 343, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ht direction, but mostly if people soon didnt realize their mistake than it will be g...
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Line 5, column 686, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...pe. This jealousy is very harmful if we didnt realized what we are doing. Admitted...
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Line 7, column 387, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...his type of people completely different than what we defined earlier. However, the n...
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Line 7, column 440, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...defined earlier. However, the number of this people is very low, and the former is i...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'thus', 'in conclusion', 'in fact', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.206286836935 0.240241500013 86% => OK
Verbs: 0.182711198428 0.157235817809 116% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0844793713163 0.0880659088768 96% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0667976424361 0.0497285424764 134% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0844793713163 0.0444667217837 190% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.119842829077 0.12292977631 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0373280943026 0.0406280797675 92% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.4219722031 2.79330140395 87% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0157170923379 0.030933414821 51% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0628683693517 0.0997080785238 63% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00785854616896 0.0249443105267 32% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0294695481336 0.0148568991511 198% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2696.0 2732.02544248 99% => OK
No of words: 458.0 452.878318584 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.8864628821 6.0361032391 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.58838876751 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.338427947598 0.366273622748 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.248908296943 0.280924506359 89% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.148471615721 0.200843997647 74% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0873362445415 0.132149295362 66% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4219722031 2.79330140395 87% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 219.290929204 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460698689956 0.48968727796 94% => OK
Word variations: 51.4387517857 55.4138127331 93% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6194690265 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0833333333 23.380412469 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0838724552 59.4972553346 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.333333333 141.124799967 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0833333333 23.380412469 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.674092028746 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.21349557522 288% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 43.9741630277 51.4728631049 85% => OK
Elegance: 1.08823529412 1.64882698954 66% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290518421315 0.391690518653 74% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0994529289355 0.123202303941 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0751826257957 0.077325440228 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.480783857017 0.547984918172 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.112526715319 0.149214159877 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105503625915 0.161403998019 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745511924825 0.0892212321368 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.344767027856 0.385218514788 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0847349053242 0.0692045440612 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187621103322 0.275328986314 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0689835739298 0.0653680567796 106% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.30420353982 132% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88274336283 143% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 7.22455752212 111% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.70907079646 221% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.5995575221 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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