The real talent of a popular musician cannot accurately be assessed until the musician has been dead for several generations, so that his or her fame does not interfere with honest assessment
To assess the talent of a person, time is not a parameter nor a constraint.Real talent always find it's way. The thesis presented, claims that real talent can only be assessed after several years.I strongly disagree with the thesis presented, because of the following reasons.
History has witnessed lots of talented people in all the fields. Although, some people in history aren't given credit for the work they did and the battles they fought.But, as far as we talk about real talent, that too in the field of music, musicians have never failed to amaze people with talent. Talented musicians have always allured people with their fascinating music. The way musicians express their thoughts and ideas to the outside world through music is just amazing. Their talent and hard work is always praised by people world wide even after generations. To give an example, one of the most significant figures of the 20th century, musician Michael Jackson was always praised for his outstanding work in the music industry. People did not fail to recognise his talent when he was alive. Still , people and youth of new generation know how talented musician and singer he was. He demonstrated his abilities in every way possible and nobody ever failed to recognise him as a talented singer. People acknowledged his talent and so did the music industry and felicitated him with various awards.
Secondly, the author claims, for honest assessment fame should not be a barrier, so that real talent is precisely assessed. The fame of a musician or any popular person in general is not only acquired through talent but also by his/her deeds. A person might be very talented but if he is not nice to his collegues, his fans or all the peopple who are related to him in any way, his notoriety will increase. After he dies, he'll be famous and people will know him for generations but not in a good way. After a real talented and generous person dies, his eminence stays the same for generations to come. For example, if we talk about the prominent Indian singer and musician, Lata mangeshkar who passed out last year, left a huge impact on the Indian music industry.Her father died when she was just 13. She paved her way in the music industry through hard work and determination. Her fame and eminence was due to her passion and excellent work of musical compositions which had no parallel competition and which was the best of its kind.She was popular in the 1980s-1990s but still on every popular occasion, in every wedding and in sort of function, people cherish her songs. Youth of this generation is equally captivated by her songs. There are some musicians who get into the music industry due to their family background. If these people who have a strong musical background, assume that people will love them and appreciate their work just because they are already popular are unlikely to succeed. Fame, does not depend on who the person is, it depends on that person's hard work and consistency. Through hard work, real talent is achieved which is always appreciated irrespective of time.
Even if, time is really a parameter to judge the talent of a person, real talent won't ever be assessed incorrectly.People never forget an artist's hard work and dedication. Talent is unique to a person.It never comes easily. In the field of music this is prominent and the real talent can be accurately assessed from the work of the artist and not by the fame he or she attains during their life time.Life and death is not a factor to assess the real talent of a person.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, second, secondly, so, still, as to, for example, in general, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 14.8657303371 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 33.0505617978 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2936.0 2235.4752809 131% => OK
No of words: 613.0 442.535393258 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78955954323 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97582523872 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59668987984 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443719412724 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 920.7 704.065955056 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2983229875 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.857142857 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8928571429 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 25.0 10.2758426966 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330454956284 0.243740707755 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100206404201 0.0831039109588 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635711050223 0.0758088955206 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21481375539 0.150359130593 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036079904965 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 100.480337079 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.