Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Nowadays, people are more concerned about others opinion and are always busy in impressing other especially through social media. The given prompt states that in modern society, it more important to create an alluring image of oneself than accepting the reality. I strongly agree with the given idea for three reasons.
First of all, most of the people think it is important to create a good image in society because if they don't follow the current trends, they would never fit in.For example, if a person who comes from a rural background, goes to live in a urban area, might think that if he/she doesn't follow the ongoing trends, he/she won't be able to make new friends and won't fit in.In contrast, even if that person thinks that it is not important to follow the trends, some people will always mock that person, compelling him to create a good social image.Thus, people are trying to mask their real self just to mix up with the kind of people they meet on a daily basis.
Additionally, as social media is the main source of communication in today's society, many people think it is of vital importance to present their life in front of their friends, colleagues, relatives, etc. perfectly. To give an example, a 14 year old girl in India, whose father had a mediocre job, made his father bought high quality cameras to record videos for Instagram, nice clothes and an Iphone just to showcase her "perfect" life on social media.Some people compare their life with others on social media and try to include the same things in their life even if they can't afford this things.
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition 66
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: don't
...a good image in society because if they dont follow the current trends, they would n...
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Suggestion: For
...current trends, they would never fit in.For example, if a person who comes from a r...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...rom a rural background, goes to live in a urban area, might think that if he/she ...
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Suggestion: doesn't
... urban area, might think that if he/she doesnt follow the ongoing trends, he/she wont ...
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Suggestion: In
...ble to make new friends and wont fit in.In contrast, even if that person thinks th...
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Suggestion: Thus
...lling him to create a good social image.Thus, people are trying to mask their real s...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perfectly
...ir friends, colleagues, relatives, etc. perfectly. To give an example, a 14 year old girl...
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Suggestion: Some
...apos;perfect' life on social media.Some people compare their life with others o...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... same things in their life even if they cant afford this things.
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... in their life even if they cant afford this things.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, thus, as to, for example, in contrast, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 14.8657303371 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1313.0 2235.4752809 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 277.0 442.535393258 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74007220217 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.55969084622 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49848185995 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 215.323595506 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592057761733 0.4932671777 120% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 704.065955056 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 20.2370786517 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 46.0 23.0359550562 200% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 205.272785987 60.3974514979 340% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 218.833333333 118.986275619 184% => OK
Words per sentence: 46.1666666667 23.4991977007 196% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.5 5.21951772744 239% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100378258093 0.243740707755 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623497384835 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563704002288 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0793094626074 0.150359130593 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495193455432 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.0 14.1392134831 170% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.25 48.8420337079 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.1 12.1743820225 165% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.1 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 100.480337079 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 20.4 11.2143820225 182% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.