Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term goal rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
World have witnessed large number of visionaries who have made significant contributions to our society and human race as a whole. These contribution maybe in business, technological innovation, arts, literature or exploration of other celestial planets which will sustain future of human, have inspired many people to follow a vision in the life and relentlessly work for it to make happen. Instead of seeking fame and recognition, try following vision passionately and it has been proved that fame and respect from others will follow.
Serving continuously to achieve vision one has decided, make everything possible with the help of creativity and seeking help from others as well as providing help in need. Following this path of long-term goal will not only help get desired fame and respect of other people but also serve to instill a sense of achievement and success which is most important for anyone to be happy. It gets you happiness and also make contribution towards enhancing one's abilities, knowledge and creativity and constant improvement in personality. Success behind pursuing long-term vision itself requires great deal of failure tolerance, patience and perpetual learning from everywhere. Eventually, providing everything one has ever need.
As there are visionaries, there are also one-hit wonders who have commanded immediate fame and recognitions among people with just small amount of work. One may want to argue that it is good if one can get that type of opportunities, but as many have witnessed that it is not very true in all the cases. Often cases of one-hit wonders are vanished after some time from everybody's mind, because luck might not work always in favour. Some of which also commanded long lasting respect, with continuously innovating and improving their work, following some vision to achieve greater than fame. Also one-hit wonder artists feel sense of failure after loosing recognition which discourages them.
For an example, Elon Musk, great innovator and tech tycoon has been best example of following vision and passion amongst youth. He dreamt of world using green energy, electric cars and human living on mars and other exoplanets. He continuously work for it to achieve his vision. He was quite reach and famous after success of Paypal, instead he chose to economize the space travel and green energy. Recently, news were that he didn't know how much cash he has, maybe too less for the magnate. With the help of qualities and providing values he has commanded great respect that is everlasting and awe inspiring.
Conclusively, it might feel extremely good after getting immediate fame and recognition but doesn't last forever; at the end, success always defined by one's effort to achieve something greater than recognition and fame. Therefore, youth should be encouraged to follow long-term vision, even after having one-hit wonder because it is preserved with continuous work, giving satisfaction, sense of achievement and inspirations for others.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this contribution' or 'These contributions'?
Suggestion: This contribution; These contributions
... our society and human race as a whole. These contribution maybe in business, technological innova...
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Line 5, column 453, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...lso make contribution towards enhancing ones abilities, knowledge and creativity and...
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Line 9, column 411, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'work'.
Suggestion: always work
...everybodys mind, because luck might not work always in favour. Some of which also commanded...
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Line 9, column 592, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...me vision to achieve greater than fame. Also one-hit wonder artists feel sense of fa...
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Line 13, column 65, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'been the best'.
Suggestion: been the best
...sk, great innovator and tech tycoon has been best example of following vision and passion...
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Line 13, column 281, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...usly work for it to achieve his vision. He was quite reach and famous after succes...
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Line 13, column 294, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'reached'.
Suggestion: reached
... it to achieve his vision. He was quite reach and famous after success of Paypal, ins...
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Line 13, column 429, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...een energy. Recently, news were that he didnt know how much cash he has, maybe too le...
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Line 17, column 94, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ting immediate fame and recognition but doesnt last forever; at the end, success alway...
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Line 17, column 437, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...chievement and inspirations for others.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2551.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 477.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34800838574 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78147374859 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540880503145 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 801.0 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4951068719 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.476190476 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7142857143 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.7619047619 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159644431624 0.243740707755 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0432174014818 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586372074246 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0928331351592 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.061371237349 0.0667264976115 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 11.8971910112 134% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.