Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
It is said,youth defines and writes the future for tomorrow.It is indeed true that youth should target a long-term,realisitic goal rather than seeking a goal possessed with instant fame and recognition.A long term goal not only horizons the welfare of self-being but also contributes in upbringing of society and nation.Also,given exceptions,it must not be ignored that targeting an immediate aim does not help in promoting overall prosperity,provided undertaking a rational and benevolent goal.
A long term goal sheds a light on existing issues and tends to eradicate them as well.When a young mind undertakes a challenge or rather a pertaining issue and is able to fathom and solve,he/she is termed as an inspiration in our society,later resulting in as astounding entrepreneurs. This reflects they are diligent,have ability to take risks,audacity to challenge self and even propose new ideas.For example,Microsoft founder Bill Gates and late CEO of Apple Inc.Steve Jobs,as a young mind,proposed numerate out of box ideas and were able to establish a small firm which later went on to be the biggest cell phone and computer manufacturing and selling company in the world, provided the path they took was filled with several obstructions and challenges.In addition,Hans Zimmer from Frankfurt,Germany and A.R.Rahmaan from Chennai,India,both were predetermined to learn music from an early age.Today,they are the pioneers of modern music industry and have managed to be persistent in producing some of the best musical melodies ever composed.
Setting a goal filled with recognition does not certainly means taking a short-term goal.Sure,there are temporary perks which are yielded by such goals,but these certainly do not provide human satisfaction and inner peace.Examples,famous golfer Tiger Woods was inspected and pleaded guilty in a scandal which led to abomination of his career.Los Angeles born Shia LaBeouf, starred in one of the best science fiction movie series,Transformers,was accused for assaulting his neighbor with a deadly weapon for a trivial reason like blocking his path with his car.It can be concluded that fame played a major key role in destruction of their career and coined them as notorious celebrities.
But having fame is not every time negligent or heedless.Stating an exception,Lebrown James,a famous American basketball player from Cleaveland,helped almost 800 children to graduate from high school.Similarly,a young popular band,One Direction, set various concerts and collected almost 340000$ in support for cancer.Hence,having fame depends on one's self attitude,weather to continue with a superfluous path or to undertake a benign one.
Thus,a long-term goal surely helps benefiting the human world,provided the goal is rational.Similar case is with the individual undertaking taking a fame packed path.It is often said,the biggest challenge about success is the ability to keep quiet.Thus,it may be a long term or short term goal,the results and ramifications ultimately depends on attitude and behavior of the individual undertaking the goal.
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- Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for t 58
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'similarly', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'for example', 'in addition']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.260628465804 0.240241500013 108% => OK
Verbs: 0.192236598891 0.157235817809 122% => OK
Adjectives: 0.109057301294 0.0880659088768 124% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0443622920518 0.0497285424764 89% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0258780036969 0.0444667217837 58% => OK
Prepositions: 0.097966728281 0.12292977631 80% => OK
Participles: 0.0591497227357 0.0406280797675 146% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.7938789806 2.79330140395 136% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0240295748614 0.030933414821 78% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0887245841035 0.0997080785238 89% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00739371534196 0.0249443105267 30% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.00554528650647 0.0148568991511 37% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3087.0 2732.02544248 113% => OK
No of words: 463.0 452.878318584 102% => OK
Chars per words: 6.66738660907 6.0361032391 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.58838876751 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.403887688985 0.366273622748 110% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.328293736501 0.280924506359 117% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.241900647948 0.200843997647 120% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.19222462203 0.132149295362 145% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.7938789806 2.79330140395 136% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 219.290929204 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61555075594 0.48968727796 126% => OK
Word variations: 80.6654670531 55.4138127331 146% => OK
How many sentences: 6.0 20.6194690265 29% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 77.1666666667 23.380412469 330% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 163.096767459 59.4972553346 274% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 514.5 141.124799967 365% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 77.1666666667 23.380412469 330% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.83333333333 0.674092028746 272% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 54.0 5.21349557522 1036% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 109.996040317 51.4728631049 214% => OK
Elegance: 1.59154929577 1.64882698954 97% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36190281151 0.391690518653 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.150149909228 0.123202303941 122% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0447970432721 0.077325440228 58% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.916325594584 0.547984918172 167% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.148565576804 0.149214159877 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.200442822646 0.161403998019 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0388970500858 0.0892212321368 44% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.177770104601 0.385218514788 46% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.07704009123 0.0692045440612 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210860531476 0.275328986314 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511097462576 0.0653680567796 78% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.4325221239 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.30420353982 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88274336283 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 7.22455752212 69% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.70907079646 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 6.0 13.5995575221 44% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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