Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Everyone in this world wants to be famous and popular in the desired field, and who would not want a short-cut to achieve there desire and dreams. According to the prompt, young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition. I strongly agree with the prompt and would like to give following reasons for the same in the subsequent paragraphs.
Young people are those group of the population who don't have much maturity and ability to handle fame and recognition at an early age. It is difficult for them to maintain a balance between things which credited them fame and the things which are essential to inculcate during that tender age. For instance, many young artists say singer, dancer, nowadays youtubers focus on their skills which made them popular, this prevent them from maintaining attention at there education and other essential criterias. Also, not all of them become successful, only a handful of them are able to impact the corresponding industry for years. Thus, it is clear that immediate fame can be harmful and can have an adverse effect on the future of a young individual.
Recognition and fame are not only tough to handle but they are transitory as well, its ephemeral nature makes is dangerous for the youth who are yet to enter into the real world, the world of responsibility commitment and ability to handle the pressure. So, it is always preferred to follow a realistic goal which is always beneficial in the long run.
Young people who get famous at an early age tend to be less motivated and voracious in achieving something tough in life. As things become easy-going once they are widely known, the popularity kills the desire and passion sometimes and when this temporary fame ends it becomes difficult for them to work out something else for the future, many a time they lack skills and have to start from ground zero.
It is said that long-term and realistic goals teaches patience and are advised for better future prospects. It helps a young individual to develop a sense of desire and since these goals are realistic, an ideal role model selection is easy and also recommended. Also, it should not be the case that one should copy the exact same path but should try to build an independent path unique to the.
However, a reasonable person would suggest that early fame and recognition can help a young individual to gain more confidence, popularity and economic benefits but the transient nature of the success, the naive nature of the youth population and the underdevelopment some very important life skills like desire, passion and patience are the key factor which justifies that young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term and realistic goals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 52, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...e are those group of the population who dont have much maturity and ability to handl...
^^^^
Line 17, column 390, Rule ID: THE_SENT_END[1]
Message: Did you forget something after 'the'?
... to build an independent path unique to the. However, a reasonable person would...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, thus, well, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2322.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 466.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98283261803 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6233113463 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504291845494 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 730.8 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.4749071163 60.3974514979 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.125 118.986275619 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.125 23.4991977007 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360580123407 0.243740707755 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128954233216 0.0831039109588 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.208823099777 0.0758088955206 275% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187907839913 0.150359130593 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126878890885 0.0667264976115 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.