The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar diagram depicts the percentage of regular physical activity of Australian nationalities during 2010. Overall, females give more importance to the physical activity than men.

It is clear from the graph that, there were around 52.8% of young men in the 15-24 age group regularly doing physical activities, which is 5% higher than that of women. Even though these preference declining gradually among the age groups from 25 to 44, before increasing to 43.1% in 45 to 54 age group. Interestingly, older men were more conscious about health and steadily increased their regular physical exercise along with age.

In contrast, least number of young females involved in the regular activities, whereas the percentage significantly increased with age to 53.3% before declining into 53 % among 55 to 64 age group. However, after 65, both men and women performed almost equal percentage of regular physical activity.

In conclusion, the physical activity of women surpassed with age than the men. Although almost half proportion of 35 to 64 years women do physical activity regularly, the lowest rate is reported from 35 to 44 age group of men.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this preference' or 'these preferences'?
Suggestion: this preference; these preferences
... higher than that of women. Even though these preference declining gradually among the age group...
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Line 5, column 12, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: ', the least'.
Suggestion: , the least
... exercise along with age. In contrast, least number of young females involved in the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, whereas, in conclusion, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 967.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 185.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22702702703 4.92477711251 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75684854455 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583783783784 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 295.2 283.868780488 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5018838725 43.030603864 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.444444444 112.824112599 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5555555556 22.9334400587 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.23603664747 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404614483653 0.215688989381 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.190017236572 0.103423049105 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709602735489 0.0843802449381 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264531519724 0.15604864568 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455717302681 0.0819641961636 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.2329268293 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 61.2550243902 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 11.4140731707 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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