The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Parissa on Sat, 11/17/2018 - 06:47

The bar chart provides information on the proportion of Australian male and female in different age ranges who did sport during 2010.

A short glance at the bar chart reveals that women do more physical activity than men.

A more detailed look at the bar chart brings to mind that in the youngest age, men did more sport compared to women. Also over the 65 years old, ration of Australian male and female is closed to each other. Moreover, the first gap happened in 35 to 44 that shows female are absolutely more active.

Overall, it is clear in the bar chart that with the exception of youngest and oldest age group, men did less sports rather than women.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 118, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
..., men did more sport compared to women. Also over the 65 years old, ration of Austra...
^^^^
Line 7, column 44, Rule ID: WITH_THE_EXCEPTION_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'except' or 'except for'
Suggestion: except; except for
...rall, it is clear in the bar chart that with the exception of youngest and oldest age group, men did ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 105, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun sports is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... youngest and oldest age group, men did less sports rather than women.
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, moreover, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 33.7804878049 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 547.0 965.302439024 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 119.0 196.424390244 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59663865546 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.30283395202 3.73543355544 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25617341539 2.65546596893 85% => OK
Unique words: 74.0 106.607317073 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621848739496 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 164.7 283.868780488 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.5507501891 43.030603864 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.1666666667 112.824112599 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8333333333 22.9334400587 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.23603664747 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303856875929 0.215688989381 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149215110814 0.103423049105 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0921545360385 0.0843802449381 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201192212619 0.15604864568 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544899532975 0.0819641961636 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.2329268293 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 11.4140731707 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 40.7170731707 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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