The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Australia

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The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Australia.

The given bar chart shows the proportion of three kind of visitors (born in Australia; new migrants born in English-speaking countries, and new migrants born in other countries) came to different places in Australia.

Overall, Cinema was by far the most popular place to visit by the three mentioned elements

To begin with, cinema is considered the most popular place in Australia, with 70% and 65% people born in Australia and new migrants born in English-speaking countries show interest. In contrast, only a small proportion of Australians went to the theatre regularly, at around 20%, about three times less than that at the cinema. New migrants who were born in other countries, tend to have the least interest in spending time at the theatre, which only has 10%.

In contrast to the theatre, new migrants from other countries seemed to enjoy themselves at the library, approximately 55%. Meanwhile, the number of people who were born in Australia and new migrants in English-speaking countries interest in visiting the zoo was 41% and 50% respectively, much higher than the number of people who like visiting the zoo

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 51, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'kind' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'kinds'.
Suggestion: kinds
...bar chart shows the proportion of three kind of visitors born in Australia; new migr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, while, in contrast, kind of, in contrast to, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 948.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 185.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12432432432 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99058175861 2.65546596893 113% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 106.607317073 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513513513514 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 270.0 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.4859864627 43.030603864 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.0 112.824112599 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8333333333 22.9334400587 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3333333333 5.23603664747 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208860346023 0.215688989381 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0968613075036 0.103423049105 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0984029449965 0.0843802449381 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1377594641 0.15604864568 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405285521137 0.0819641961636 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.2329268293 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 61.2550243902 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.3012195122 134% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 11.4140731707 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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