The diagram shows how chocolate is produced Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparison relevant

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The diagram shows how chocolate is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparison relevant.

The diagram depicts the procedure that chocolate is manufactured by cacao trees.
Overall, there are diverse loads of stages to produce an entire product, involving up to ten steps. The process begins with harvesting ripe red pods from the tress raised in some parts of Indonesia and ends with the finished products, bars of chocolate.
The first step in making chocolate is the extraction of white cocoa beans form ripe red pods which were grown on cacao trees indigenous to South America, Africa and Indonesia. Afterward, these cocoa beans underwent fermentation process a span of 2 to 10 days. Before being exposed to sunshine’s unspecified temperatures in order to reach dryness. These dehydrated beans were packaged in loads of large sacks.
The process steadily continues when tons of sacks involving dehydrated beans were delivered to a factory by train and lorry. The next stage is aforementioned beans experienced roasted procedure under temperature rough 120 to 150 degrees Celsius. After which they were sent to a cylindrical flat to being crushed so as to reject all of its outer shell. Finally, the removed parts were pressed to produce into liquid.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 261, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ntation process a span of 2 to 10 days. Before being exposed to sunshine’s unspecified...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 312, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... to a cylindrical flat to being crushed so as to reject all of its outer shell. Finally,...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 416, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ts were pressed to produce into liquid.
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, so, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 981.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 189.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19047619048 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76012024492 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 106.607317073 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.547539520022 122% => OK
syllable_count: 304.2 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.2750180088 43.030603864 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.1818181818 112.824112599 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1818181818 22.9334400587 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.63636363636 5.23603664747 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0594533960008 0.215688989381 28% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0242351131367 0.103423049105 23% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0363922376042 0.0843802449381 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0482172681056 0.15604864568 31% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388072617738 0.0819641961636 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 11.4140731707 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.06136585366 113% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 40.7170731707 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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