The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.

Essay topics:

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Submitted by sjakhil on Mon, 08/19/2019 - 04:46

<p style="color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Verdana, Geneva, sans-serif; font-size: 15px; white-space: normal;">The pictures illustrate the changes, which have taken place at West Park secondary school from 1950 to 2010.</p><p style="color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Verdana, Geneva, sans-serif; font-size: 15px; white-space: normal;">Firstly, significant alterations occurred to the farmland, it was redesigned to a sports field in 1980 and then to a car park in 2010. There was an expansion of the car park in 2010 and the sport field was placed between the car park and the playground.</p><p style="color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Verdana, Geneva, sans-serif; font-size: 15px; white-space: normal;">Moreover, substantial changes happened to the houses. They were removed from the map, car park and science block taking their place.</p><p style="color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Verdana, Geneva, sans-serif; font-size: 15px; white-space: normal;">Furthermore, a science block was added to the school building in 1980 and playground was reduced in size. However, the locations of the playground and school were not modified.</p><p style="color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Verdana, Geneva, sans-serif; font-size: 15px; white-space: normal;">In contrast, the main road remained unchanged throughout the period.</p><p style="color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Verdana, Geneva, sans-serif; font-size: 15px; white-space: normal;">Overall, farmland and houses disappeared from the map, playground was abridged, and there were built science block, car park and sports field.</p><p style="color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Verdana, Geneva, sans-serif; font-size: 15px; white-space: normal;"></p><p style="color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Verdana, Geneva, sans-serif; font-size: 15px; white-space: normal;"><br></p>

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
This essay topic by users
Post date Users Rates Link to Content
2020-01-23 CharanpreetSingh 78 view
2019-12-05 kaka singh 67 view
2019-09-15 rushabh71 84 view
2019-08-19 sjakhil 56 view
2019-08-19 sjakhil 56 view
>>> More users practiced this topic >>>
Essay Categories
IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic
Essays by user sjakhil :
>>> more essays by the user >>>

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, then, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1638.0 965.302439024 170% => OK
No of words: 238.0 196.424390244 121% => OK
Chars per words: 6.88235294118 4.92477711251 140% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.79701670349 2.65546596893 181% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.411764705882 0.547539520022 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 410.4 283.868780488 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 59.0 22.4926829268 262% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 197.503164532 43.030603864 459% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 409.5 112.824112599 363% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 59.5 22.9334400587 259% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 19.25 5.23603664747 368% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 1.0 3.83414634146 26% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0522917260445 0.215688989381 24% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520720452018 0.103423049105 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0320425870571 0.0843802449381 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0522917260445 0.15604864568 34% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 40.7 13.2329268293 308% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 3.13 61.2550243902 5% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 18.2 6.51609756098 279% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 27.5 10.3012195122 267% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 23.51 11.4140731707 206% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.06136585366 120% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 32.0 11.4329268293 280% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 25.6 10.9970731707 233% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 28.0 11.0658536585 253% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Minimum two paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.