The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024

Essay topics:

The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

The two pictures illustrate the school site as it was in 2004 as well as the developments that are planned for it in 2024.

Overall, the number of students in the school is expected to increase in two decades. It is clear that there are some considerable changes planned for the school site, including the construction of car park 2 and school building 3.

In 2004, there were 600 student in the site of a school. There were a large forest area which ran from south to east. The west area of school site is the road, which was connected to car park. In the north part of school site, there were sports field and school building 2 which were connected with the west area via a path. Meanwhile, people can go to the school building 1 via main entrance.

In 2024, the number of students is anticipated to increase at 1000 students. The sports field will move to the east and become smaller. A school building 3 will be built and replaced the old sports field. The part of path will be demolished to make way for the connection between school building 1 and 2, which will be linked to school building 3 via path. Finally, the car park 2 will be in the east school site which will be linked through new road to school building 2 and car park 1.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 25, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'student' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'students'.
Suggestion: students
... building 3. In 2004, there were 600 student in the site of a school. There were a l...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 296, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r the connection between school building 1 and 2, which will be linked to school ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, so, well, while, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 7.0 243% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 1.00243902439 698% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1020.0 965.302439024 106% => OK
No of words: 233.0 196.424390244 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.37768240343 4.92477711251 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36003116383 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.437768240343 0.547539520022 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 279.0 283.868780488 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.4922596582 43.030603864 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.4615384615 112.824112599 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9230769231 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.76923076923 5.23603664747 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381865283373 0.215688989381 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169849995047 0.103423049105 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137298414112 0.0843802449381 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.30828781275 0.15604864568 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0957414435998 0.0819641961636 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 13.2329268293 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 88.06 61.2550243902 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 10.3012195122 50% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.83 11.4140731707 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.24 8.06136585366 77% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 40.7170731707 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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