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The line graph gives the information, about the intake of margarine, low fat and reduced spreads and butter in grams, between 1981 and 2007. Overall, it is immediately apparent that, consumption of spreads has reduced over the years.
Butter was seen most preferred spread, which stood at 140 grams in 1981. There was a gradual increase in the use, which reached its peak in 1986 for 160 grams. Thereafter, consumption of butter was drastically reduced to 50 grams in 2007.
On the contrary, low fat and reduced spreads were less preferred, their consumption was started in 1996 and stood as low at 10 grams. There was a significant increase about 80 grams by 2001, though unlike it had a gradual fall by 2007 to 70 grams.
However, margarine was low in intake at 80 grams in 1981, and over the time frame it plunged to 40 grams by 2007, which became the least used spread compared to all three in the graph.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 756.0 965.302439024 78% => OK
No of words: 162.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48838178255 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 106.607317073 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574074074074 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 204.3 283.868780488 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7797079362 43.030603864 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5 112.824112599 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 22.9334400587 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 5.23603664747 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0319767368217 0.215688989381 15% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0157538894689 0.103423049105 15% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0309708403779 0.0843802449381 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0253240995852 0.15604864568 16% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028012228337 0.0819641961636 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.2329268293 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 61.2550243902 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 11.4140731707 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 40.7170731707 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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