The graph below gives information about daily salt intake in the USA in 2000

Given is the bar chart depicting the amount of salt that is absorbed into the body daily for US citizens of contrasting ages in 2000
Perceptibly, for all ages, the salt intake in masculine is higher than that of female. The 20 to 39 ages group consumes the most salt, therefore this group reaches the peak of the diagram.
Regarding the salt intake in the youngest group of male, the amount of salt that is taken into the body is more than 2000 milligrams a bit, as well as the lowest one. Followed by 6 to 11-year-olds, which the volume of salt intake drastically leaps to 3500 milligrams, and this upswing trend is continued until it reaches the peak in the middle-ages group, with over 4500 milligrams. However, the contrast trend is true for the 40 to 60-year-olds group and over 60 year olds, the salt intake plunges to 3500 milligrams in the oldest group.
In females, there is an exiguous disproportion in the absorbed salt between 6 to 11 and 40 to 60 age groups, with the amounts fluctuating in the vicinity of 3000 and 3500 milligrams. The salt intake for under 6-year-olds group is merely under 1500 milligrams, followed by that of for the oldest group, which the amount meets the recommended adult salt intake, 2500 milligrams.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... US citizens of contrasting ages in 2000 Perceptibly, for all ages, the salt inta...
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... group reaches the peak of the diagram. Regarding the salt intake in the younges...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, regarding, so, therefore, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1025.0 965.302439024 106% => OK
No of words: 219.0 196.424390244 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6803652968 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67546400258 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493150684932 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 291.6 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.4926829268 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.0365023393 43.030603864 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.428571429 112.824112599 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.2857142857 22.9334400587 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 5.23603664747 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165054101915 0.215688989381 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0913112441926 0.103423049105 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512919062827 0.0843802449381 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115960099567 0.15604864568 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0211833526846 0.0819641961636 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.2329268293 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.39 61.2550243902 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.46 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.9970731707 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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