The graph shows the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia between 1980 and 2010.

Essay topics:

The graph shows the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia between 1980 and 2010.

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of overweight between both sexes during a period of thirty years from 1980 to 2010.

Overall, the rate of obese was more among male than female throughout the given period. Also, the graph for both male and female witnessed a upward trend except in the last decade.

In 1980, the figure for male overweight started at approximately 48%, then during the period from 1980 to 1990, there was a slight increase in male fatty just by 2%. Subsequently, this rate reached a peak of 70% in 2000, and Ultimately the proportion experienced a steady decrease and finished at around 68%.

For female, the trend was similar to male. The graph stood at 30% at the beginning of period, then there was a slight increase during a next decade with account for 40%. The percentage of fatty remind exchange in 2010, before increasing in 2000 with accounting for 50%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The bar chart illustrates the percentage...
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Line 5, column 140, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...raph for both male and female witnessed a upward trend except in the last decade....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 755.0 965.302439024 78% => OK
No of words: 154.0 196.424390244 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9025974026 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52273666998 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53690088138 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 91.0 106.607317073 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590909090909 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 216.9 283.868780488 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.5279379503 43.030603864 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.375 112.824112599 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.75 5.23603664747 33% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153293085328 0.215688989381 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692931728043 0.103423049105 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828323829674 0.0843802449381 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111133714235 0.15604864568 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0882334084712 0.0819641961636 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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