The pie charts below illustrate some common data about electronic games players' age, gender and some kinds of best-selling games in South Korea in through the year 2003.
Overall, electronic games are very famous with the young people in Korea, specially the boys. Action is a type of games which attract a large amounts of players.
Looking at the detail, nearly half of all Korean gamers were around 18 to 35 years old. However, the percentages of under 18 years old electronic game plays was also noticeable high with 35%. The last age group was over 35 years old, which just accounted 23% of players. Obviously, the proportions of male gamers was significantly outnumbered compared with the other gender ( 72% and 28% respectively ).
More specifically, a considerable amounts of South Korean game players enjoyed playing action games (42%). The second most noticeable data was the percentages of sports game players which reached 21%. The racing games were the third best-selling game type in Korea which accounted for more than a tenth of the total number of games mentioned. Role-play games and education games had a similar proportion ( 7% for each type). The amounts of other unmentioned games was less than these two kinds of game 1%.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, second, so, third
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1039.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 206.0 196.424390244 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04368932039 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78849575616 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62990128693 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 106.607317073 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582524271845 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 304.2 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.8675134595 43.030603864 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5833333333 112.824112599 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1666666667 22.9334400587 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.23603664747 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259697453407 0.215688989381 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0996212391719 0.103423049105 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0911409294835 0.0843802449381 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181047461349 0.15604864568 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106727117913 0.0819641961636 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 61.2550243902 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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