With the increasing demand for energy sources such as oil and gas, should people looking for sources of oil and gas in remote and untouched places?
Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages of damaging such areas?
Rapid growth of population has always recognized as alarmed issue due to number of sequential problems it brought back. one of its serious problem is the lack of energy sources, leading to the demand of seeking new areas for exploiting. Some of the states schemed for using oil and gas in isolated and intact lands. However, as every solution that will be imposing, benefits and drawbacks will always be there as I will discuss below.
On one hand, exploiting untouched places could immediately provide enormous amount of oil and gas, solving the existing problem of lacking energy sources. since almost all of the remote places are intensively immense, the potential of this field is massive. government as well as companies will make use of this opportunities to construct more factories, expanding the influence and enriching their countries. For instance, Saudi Arabia is the oil richest country in the world, due to its gigantic natural advantages, the government has earned a lot of money by selling raw oil and gas to developed countries, whose technology are cutting edge so that they could process these materials.
However, since oil and gas could not be renewable, after being exploited for long period of time, lands will become exhausted, making us to continuously seeking for new sources; therefore, it is just temporary solution to cope with alarmed problems. Moreover, if we still use up all of the recent sources, the next generation will have to face with more and more serious problems than we do at the moment. so, instead of temporary solution, government should look for a permanent one, such as developing the alternatives - renewable energy sources (solar, wind/tidal turbines, etc). With these modern energy, the production of energy could meet the demand of huge population, solving one of the hottest issues nowadays. Besides, as the majority of remote places are forests or nature reserves, destruction leads to serious consequences because trees are primary sources, providing oxygen for respiration and avoiding environmental issues (greenhouse effect) spreading or exacerbating.
From all of the above, I think that exploiting remote areas is not the only solution to the problems of lacking energy sources. there are other considerations as well, such as developing alternative and renewable sources, of which unlike the first mentioned solution, their advantages outweigh the disadvantages. I believe that in the future, these renewable energy sources could replace the traditional ones, meeting the demand of the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, look, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, as for, as to, for instance, i think, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 1.00243902439 1197% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 5.60731707317 392% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 33.7804878049 145% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 3.97073170732 403% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2162.0 965.302439024 224% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 404.0 196.424390244 206% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35148514851 4.92477711251 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 3.73543355544 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85364595376 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 106.607317073 215% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566831683168 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 283.868780488 241% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.07073170732 560% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.378984061 43.030603864 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.125 112.824112599 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.125 5.23603664747 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 1.69756097561 766% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 1.13902439024 615% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311943898322 0.215688989381 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0924978372418 0.103423049105 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595146974933 0.0843802449381 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179698893183 0.15604864568 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0404310881971 0.0819641961636 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.2329268293 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 61.2550243902 61% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.3012195122 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 11.4140731707 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.06136585366 120% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 40.7170731707 302% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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