A letter to the manager of a sport center that is about to close

Dear Mr Smith

I am writing with regard to the closure of university hiking group. This news made me really sad, so I decided to inform you about my opinion.

Yesterday I saw your message in broadcasting channel of the group. It was mentioned that the university headquarters have decided to inhibit the group’s activity because of some safety reasons.

I personally believe that accidents are unavoidable, although we can control them by organizing plans for hikers and nature lovers, bye the help of knowledgeable coaches and well trained group members. This approach not only minimizes safety problems, but also helps amateur members to hone their skills and become a resource of knowledge and experience for the future.

Unfortunately the message put a deep impact on me since this group was a trustful network of athletes to spend quality time with, and we had shaped strong bonds between members as well.

I hope you could convince the headquarters to reconsider their decision.

Yours faithfully

Nancy White

Votes
Average: 1.1 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, really, so, well, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 5.60731707317 410% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 878.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28915662651 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83060744553 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.734939759036 0.547539520022 134% => OK
syllable_count: 267.3 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 1.53170731707 457% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.9014743023 43.030603864 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5555555556 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4444444444 22.9334400587 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77777777778 5.23603664747 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0159260001392 0.215688989381 7% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00677838419103 0.103423049105 7% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0191721657078 0.0843802449381 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00952838011049 0.15604864568 6% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.019056760221 0.0819641961636 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.2329268293 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 61.2550243902 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 11.4140731707 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.06136585366 115% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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