In recent years, many countries have become extremely concerned about the increase in crimes committed by young people. Tough measures and strict punishments are necessary to stop youths from re-offending.
To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion ?
Latterly the expanding level of crimes offended by young people immensely worries vast majority of people. Their is an idea that taking severe measures and higher penalties would avoid teens from re-committing. Actually, I see this point of view, but not completely agree with it as I think that it is not the best way to prevent youth's crimes because if we do them, we can not solve the cause, we just solve the effect.
First of all, we should improve education system especially in ordinary high schools, where teenagers study and their basic ideas about future built. The lack of proper education can lead to abominable consequences like committing crime as they do not know what is right or not. Hence, we can increase their awareness of what they do. Moreover, pedants are responsible for their children until they reach majority age. So that encouraging parents to pay more attention on their children would be great idea especially if they held responsible in law.
Secondly, difficulties in finding job after being released is one of the causes of this alarming trend. This tendency leads people to again suffer from lack of financial support, which was main reason of committing crime at the first time, so that situation repeats. Instead of higher penalties teaching them new activities at prison would help not only them, but also to the society. As a result, they would easily reintegrate back into society.
To sum up, I want to say that severe measures are just waist of them, which moreover could lead to youth being badly influenced in the prison. Thus educating is the best solution, which copes with the main cause.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, i think, as a result, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 1.00243902439 898% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 32.0 5.60731707317 571% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1366.0 965.302439024 142% => OK
No of words: 278.0 196.424390244 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91366906475 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 3.73543355544 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51280041656 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 106.607317073 163% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625899280576 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 414.0 283.868780488 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 1.53170731707 588% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.0755898513 43.030603864 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5714285714 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 22.9334400587 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 5.23603664747 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 1.13902439024 702% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145388808124 0.215688989381 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0468879454214 0.103423049105 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392573676265 0.0843802449381 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0838043086325 0.15604864568 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421996424452 0.0819641961636 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 61.2550243902 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 40.7170731707 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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