You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation.Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter:Say what the problem is.Describe the accommod

Dear Sir,
I am XYZ studying the course ‘Advanced English’ in Toronto. As per our last discussion I want to thank you for providing me the accommodation in Flat 302 - 54 South Avenue, Newtown. But there is an issue which I want to bring to your attention.
As you may know, In my flat there is a main door which has a security lock that would activated and deactivated with a passcode to prevent any unauthorized entry. Last week one of my roommate has changed the passcode to a different pin and tried to activate the lock again, but to our surprise the security lock isn’t functioning the way it used to be. This failed security system is a big concern for us, as this was crucial factor which we considered while selecting this flat in the first place.
Can you please replace the security lock or modify it in any way to use a new passcode ? Awaiting your reply.
Thanks and Regards,
XYZ

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, I am XYZ studying the course 'Advan...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ch I want to bring to your attention. As you may know, In my flat there is a m...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...electing this flat in the first place. Can you please replace the security lock...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, while, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 5.60731707317 375% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 16.0 33.7804878049 47% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 751.0 965.302439024 78% => OK
No of words: 164.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57926829268 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57858190836 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74509155636 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.640243902439 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 234.0 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.9268536516 43.030603864 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4444444444 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2222222222 22.9334400587 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55555555556 5.23603664747 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0947187617185 0.215688989381 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0429078583282 0.103423049105 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0352404128527 0.0843802449381 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0731167826775 0.15604864568 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044334206052 0.0819641961636 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.2329268293 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 11.4140731707 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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