After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department.Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department. In the letter mention:Why do you want to switch departments?Which department would you prefer

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After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department.Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department. In the letter mention:
Why do you want to switch departments?
Which department would you prefer?
Why do you think you are a good fit in that department?

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter on my keen interest for changing my place into a different department within the organization. As you know that I am working in the Sales for more than 3 years and I am very happy with the experience and skills which I have gained working into this department. However, recently I completed my Post Graduation in Marketing and I assume it will be a right time to alter my role and responsibility.

Undoubtedly, I will be more interested to join the marketing team in the upcoming years of my service. Also, I will be always available to extend a hand to those who seek my advice in the Sales team.

I believe My current qualification has added a value to my skills which I would like to further use it for the advancement of our organization. I would be grateful if you could give me a chance to prove myself.Looking forward to see a positive response from your side.

Yours faithfully
Deepak Sharma

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 211, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Looking
... could give me a chance to prove myself.Looking forward to see a positive response from...
^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 227, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to seeing'.
Suggestion: to seeing
... chance to prove myself.Looking forward to see a positive response from your side. ...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, so, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 790.0 937.175257732 84% => OK
No of words: 170.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64705882353 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99061970641 2.54303337028 118% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 127.690721649 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.623529411765 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 253.8 290.88556701 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.4959413445 44.8134815571 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.75 76.5299724578 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 16.8248392259 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 4.34317383033 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161550146245 0.216113520407 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675958209262 0.0766984524023 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0578611899416 0.0603063233224 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0903639457769 0.12726935374 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644506516634 0.0580467560999 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 8.37731958763 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 8.71597938144 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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