General Writing Sample Task 1 #58 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are a student at an English language school in Brighton and are living in private accommodation with other flat mates. You have not had hot water or heating for some time. The landlord’s workmen have tried to fix the problem but without success. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter,
* state your reason for writing
*describe the problems and explain how you feel
*propose a solution and risk the landlord to take action
Dear Mr Whitman,
I am writing to complain regarding some of the broken facilities you have failed to fix. Last week me and my roommates complained to you about the broken heating system in the flat that you have rented us.
We have been having troubles with getting hot water for bath and the temperature inside the apartment is really unbearable since it is the middle of winter season. We are practically freezing at night and have not had a good night’s sleep from last week onwards. We are distraught and it has been a nightmare. We had to cuddle under a bunch of blankets and even then the cold was unbearable.
I think it is best you replace the heating system altogether instead of trying to fix. Your workers tried to repair the heater and it only worked for a couple of hours. We tried calling them and they said they are unable to fix the boiler permanently because it was a cheap one that is easily damaged. I do not see any reason as to why we should continue paying the utility bill for heating system when it is not even working properly. Moreover, we might have to resort to legal action for the emotional stress we sustained during last week along with a refund for last week’s rent.
We look forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely
Depa
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 36, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...an, I am writing to complain regarding some of the broken facilities you have failed to fi...
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Line 2, column 207, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...em in the flat that you have rented us. We have been having troubles with gettin...
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Line 4, column 269, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ht's sleep from last week onwards. We are distraught and it has been a nightm...
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Line 4, column 316, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...distraught and it has been a nightmare. We had to cuddle under a bunch of blankets...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
look, moreover, really, regarding, so, then, as to, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.48453608247 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1059.0 937.175257732 113% => OK
No of words: 231.0 206.0 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58441558442 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43856314381 2.54303337028 96% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61038961039 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 321.3 290.88556701 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0615215801 44.8134815571 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.4615384615 76.5299724578 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7692307692 16.8248392259 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53846153846 4.34317383033 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 7.41237113402 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 1.49484536082 468% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198426985604 0.216113520407 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698221472245 0.0766984524023 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627916653993 0.0603063233224 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135122842003 0.12726935374 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0629266208285 0.0580467560999 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 8.37731958763 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 8.71597938144 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 7.59969072165 100% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.