A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the

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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter :
describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
summarise the benefits of paying for concerts
say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir/Madam,

First of all I must acknowledge your decision to spend money for the betterment of people. I am writing this letter to express my views on how your sponsorship will benefit sports team and proper management of upcoming concerts and also share my opinion for the same

Let me share positive effects of sponsoring the sports teams. Firstly, there are some children who are good sports persons and they can do better if they get proper training. Secondly,these players could do better by purchasing equipments for proper training from the sponsorship amount. Lastly, it would be great platform for your organisation for advertising our products on large platform.

Additionally, there are certain advantages of supporting concerts too. The most of people are so busy with their mundane lifestyle, and the entertainment activity not only rejuvenates them but also relaxes them mentally. Furthermore, by enjoying musical shows they can spend qualitative time with their family and friends.

I personally think your assistance by sponsoring sports team will not only benefit to children but also to your company, whereas there are multiple ways by which people can relaxes.

Hope you would consider my valuable suggestion and look forward to hearing positive response from you.

Yours faithfully,
John Karle

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Dear Sir/Madam, First of all I must acknowledge your dec...
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Line 7, column 76, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...antages of supporting concerts too. The most of people are so busy with their mundane lifestyl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, lastly, look, second, secondly, so, whereas, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1131.0 937.175257732 121% => OK
No of words: 208.0 206.0 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4375 4.54256449028 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83240817286 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 127.690721649 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.649038461538 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 333.9 290.88556701 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2111030482 44.8134815571 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.818181818 76.5299724578 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9090909091 16.8248392259 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.18181818182 4.34317383033 211% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229737656719 0.216113520407 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0771701043236 0.0766984524023 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0584710883961 0.0603063233224 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108825640044 0.12726935374 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0764232227037 0.0580467560999 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 8.37731958763 162% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 70.7449484536 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 8.71597938144 164% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 7.59969072165 113% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 41.2886597938 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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