A lot of young people nowadays look up to celebrities as their role models,even though there are aspects of these celebrity's lives that can motivate youngsters. I do not believe they should be looked up to as role model.
First of all,a lot of glamorous stars do hard drugs so much so that quite a handful of them have had to go to rehab. In recent times a lot of A-list artists have been convicted for the use hard drugs. This is not something youngsters should emulate.
In addition, a lot of these stars suffer from depression which results in some of them going as far as taking their own lives. In the past year for instance about three successful musicians took their own lives as a result of depression.
Also, glamorous stars are not known to be some of the most well behaved people. More often than not we find them in the news for all the wrong reasons. sometimes for driving offences,domestic violence or even sexual assault.
In conclusion,celebrities should be looked up to by the youth for motivation or inspiration however they should not be seen as role models because these individual are also human and they have their own flaws.
- Technology and relationships 78
- Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are a role model for youngsters. Do u support it or not? (Agree/Disagree) 84
- Some people think healthcare should be made free for all people, while others believe people should pay for healthcare by themselves. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. 79
- Leaders of all kinds are often younger than in the past What are the reasons for this development Is this a positive or negative development 40
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 75, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , even
...k up to celebrities as their role models,even though there are aspects of these celeb...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 13, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , a
...ked up to as role model. First of all,a lot of glamorous stars do hard drugs so...
^^
Line 7, column 153, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Sometimes
... in the news for all the wrong reasons. sometimes for driving offences,domestic violence ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 183, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , domestic
... reasons. sometimes for driving offences,domestic violence or even sexual assault. In ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 14, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , celebrities
...or even sexual assault. In conclusion,celebrities should be looked up to by the youth for...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, look, so, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 32.9175257732 55% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 960.0 937.175257732 102% => OK
No of words: 204.0 206.0 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70588235294 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82723748888 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 127.690721649 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607843137255 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 292.5 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.13402061856 22% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8792882563 44.8134815571 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2727272727 76.5299724578 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5454545455 16.8248392259 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.54545454545 4.34317383033 220% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205894714489 0.216113520407 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0730224451421 0.0766984524023 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0441620102692 0.0603063233224 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105050309726 0.12726935374 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0206385648727 0.0580467560999 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 8.37731958763 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 70.7449484536 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 8.71597938144 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.