You are a member of a sports club located in an old building The manager asked you to suggest some improvements to the building Write a letter to the manager Why is the club vital for you What improvements should be made in the building How these changes

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You are a member of a sports club located in an old building. The manager asked you to suggest some improvements to the building. Write a letter to the manager.
Why is the club vital for you?
What improvements should be made in the building?
How these changes benefit the members?

Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing in response to your notice asking members for suggestions to improve the existing sports' club building.
I have been using the sports club for the last ten years. The club not only has provided me an opportunity to keep myself fit and healthily but also I have made some good friends since joining it.
I would like to put forward some changes requiring to be implemented in the building. Firstly, the changing rooms need urgent attention because there is a graffiti on the walls as well as the plaster starts peeling off from the walls. Also, the floor tiles are cracked, accompanied by seepage from the underlying water pipe. Therefore, the changing rooms require immediate refurbishment.
Furthermore, the basement area of the gym could be converted into badminton court and could be used for engaging yoga classes.
The given changes undoubtedly provide more satisfaction to the customers and also would reflect the caring approach of the authorities to the members. Also, it will attract more youngsters to join the club, especially for yoga classes.
I am looking forward to considering my suggestions.
Yours sincerely,
Kuldeep Kumar.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 144, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are a graffiti'?
Suggestion: there are a graffiti
...ing rooms need urgent attention because there is a graffiti on the walls as well as the plaster sta...
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Line 5, column 153, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a graffito' or simply 'graffiti'?
Suggestion: a graffito; graffiti
... need urgent attention because there is a graffiti on the walls as well as the plaster sta...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, look, so, therefore, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 32.9175257732 36% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 993.0 937.175257732 106% => OK
No of words: 192.0 206.0 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.171875 4.54256449028 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78025009335 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6875 0.622605031667 110% => OK
syllable_count: 295.2 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 6.0 0.824742268041 728% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.701927605 44.8134815571 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.75 76.5299724578 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 16.8248392259 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 4.34317383033 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177041472385 0.216113520407 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561929193147 0.0766984524023 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591543988162 0.0603063233224 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0884486651404 0.12726935374 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0787482475174 0.0580467560999 136% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 8.37731958763 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 8.71597938144 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 7.59969072165 118% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 41.2886597938 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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