you are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evening to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall.

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you are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evening to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall.

Dear Sir or Madam,
my name is Sharon and I want to let you know that I and my group of musicians play music in the community hall every Tuesday and Friday evenings for three years. As you know, recently we have got a request to stop our activities in this place as soon as possible and to find another new place, in order to continue playing music together.
this unexpecting change caught us not ready, thus we need you to consider our situation favorable.

let me explain our situation in more detail. The main problem is the urgently of the times. we have a performance on Sunday evening and we still need many hours of practice this weekend.
this show is very important for us because a lot of people have already bought tickets and we have extremely responsibility for this evening show.
Moreover, we also store our equipment in the storeroom at the community hall, due to we need to find a new place enough big for all our tools.

Would you kindly allow us to practice during thus Tuesday and Friday evening, it is critical for our show on Sunday. In addition, we want to suggest to leave our equipment for the next month and instead, for this, we offer our band to give a free show in front of the community without charge. If we find a new place earlier, we will move our equipment before.

Thank you for your consideration.
Yours faithfully,
Sharon

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, still, thus, in addition, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 32.9175257732 131% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1130.0 937.175257732 121% => OK
No of words: 248.0 206.0 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5564516129 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 3.78020617076 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49321399502 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 127.690721649 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560483870968 0.622605031667 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 349.2 290.88556701 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1004462014 44.8134815571 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.9230769231 76.5299724578 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0769230769 16.8248392259 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46153846154 4.34317383033 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.29896907216 163% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198933503742 0.216113520407 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746959208834 0.0766984524023 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0767355875435 0.0603063233224 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107949142769 0.12726935374 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0688580309615 0.0580467560999 119% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 8.37731958763 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 8.71597938144 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 7.59969072165 92% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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