You are working for a company. Your computer is giving some problem and it is affecting your work. Write a letter to the manager in your letter.-Describe the problem-Explain how it is affecting your work-Write what want him to regarding it

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You are working for a company. Your computer is giving some problem and it is affecting your work. Write a letter to the manager in your letter.
-Describe the problem
-Explain how it is affecting your work
-Write what want him to regarding it

Dear Sir,
I am writing to you to bring your attention with regards to my computer issues due to which my work is getting suffered. our Information & Technology manager has provided me old computer with outdated processor which is not sufficent to cope with heavy files. In fact, for 3D design and rendering works computer specifications should be on high level.

Futhermore, it often get hang and sometimes sudden shut down also, as a result, i could not able to save my work also which is really annoying. Last week, i had made presentation for this months progress meeting but due to sudden blackout i lost my work file and now once again i have re-do my work.

I would like to request to you to provide my new computer with the best specifications and external memory hard drive so my work should not get affected. Kindly instruct our I.T manager to take actions at the earliest.

Yours sincerely,
Singh

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, in fact, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 759.0 937.175257732 81% => OK
No of words: 160.0 206.0 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74375 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55655882008 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65643975958 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.7 0.622605031667 112% => OK
syllable_count: 229.5 290.88556701 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.9909713165 44.8134815571 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.875 76.5299724578 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 16.8248392259 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 4.34317383033 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215609505641 0.216113520407 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100635914304 0.0766984524023 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685250183745 0.0603063233224 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129148897799 0.12726935374 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579213013304 0.0580467560999 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 8.37731958763 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 8.71597938144 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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