you have been doing some voluntary work to help your local community. However, nou you are unable to continue doing this work.
Write a letter to manager of the ogranisation where you have been working.
It is contended that teenagers should participate in voluntary work as it is beneficial to both the individuals and the society. From my own perspective, I firmly agree with that idea, despite some criticisms aimed at its drawbacks.
On the one hand, it is undeniable that community service work has a range of shortcomings. Students are under considerable pressure due to the strenuous works at school and at home, and are left with extremely little amount of time for recreational activities. Without adequate rests, physical-demanding tasks will have a negative impact on their health and consequently their performances at school. In addition, the risk of teenagers injuring themselves or others is not minimal. There are cases which the volunteers had been confined to their bed for several weeks, interrupting their study severely.
On the other hand, the advocates, including me, raise arguments supporting the merits of communal activities. Firstly, by joining in such activities young people are making a contribution to their society, making their neighborhood a cleaner and better place for everyone. Secondly, experiences can be acquired in the process of working, which might be beneficial to your major or your future occupations. For instance, if you are learning engineering, a month in construction sites will provide you with valuable insights into different methods of erecting buildings. Last but not least, forming relationships with others may be the most popular reasons for the participation in unpaid work. To some people it is not the money earned that matters, the opportunities to make acquaintances with the same interest and hobbies play a more vital role.
In conclusion, I would like to reiterate that it is advantageous to teenagers to do unrewarded work although they have to be careful to avoid involving in accidents or affecting their health.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 441, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to engineer'.
Suggestion: to engineer
...ions. For instance, if you are learning engineering, a month in construction sites will pro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.48453608247 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 26.3917525773 171% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1596.0 937.175257732 170% => OK
No of words: 297.0 206.0 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37373737374 4.54256449028 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 3.78020617076 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18065109624 2.54303337028 125% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 127.690721649 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.639730639731 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 290.88556701 170% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 1.44329896907 624% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 30.7326357145 44.8134815571 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 76.5299724578 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2142857143 16.8248392259 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92857142857 4.34317383033 206% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152823026006 0.216113520407 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0443124312394 0.0766984524023 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0368810925359 0.0603063233224 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0874494654171 0.12726935374 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0200611601445 0.0580467560999 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 8.37731958763 173% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 70.7449484536 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 3.82989690722 292% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 7.45979381443 170% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 8.71597938144 159% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 7.59969072165 127% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 41.2886597938 225% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 8.62886597938 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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