You have read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect Correct the information in the article Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information Suggest what th

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You have read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

Correct the information in the article.
Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information.
Suggest what the magazine should do about the situation.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to you regarding the recent article you published about the city of Anand last week, 2nd September, in Times magazine.

The article gives a brief history of Anand and then continues to focus on Amul Dairy and how it changed the milk industry since it's establishment in 1948. I would like to point out an error specifying the starting date of the company. in fact, it was a major mistake as the operation of Amul started in 1942.

During that time, the atmosphere was quite hostile and there was chaos all over the country. The males we're at there was no livelihood for the females and kids. That is one of the reasons why Amul was established and it played a pivotal role in the fight against the Britishers. Those years we're very essential and the people should know how it shaped the future of not only Anand but India as a whole.

I hope you will publish this correction in next month's article. I would also urge you to ensure that all the factual data is checked before publication.

Looking forward to a positive reply.

Yours faithfully,
Jocelyn Mascarenhas.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, regarding, so, then, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 32.9175257732 58% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 921.0 937.175257732 98% => OK
No of words: 197.0 206.0 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67512690355 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48741323725 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.664974619289 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 288.9 290.88556701 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8603978086 44.8134815571 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.75 76.5299724578 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4166666667 16.8248392259 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08333333333 4.34317383033 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10684263335 0.216113520407 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0325497327433 0.0766984524023 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.03044469031 0.0603063233224 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0502975912604 0.12726935374 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354405437086 0.0580467560999 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 8.37731958763 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 8.71597938144 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 41.2886597938 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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