You have recently bought a toy online and after receiving it you discovered a problem with it. Write a letter to the online store you bought it from and say:- Describe the toy- explain the problem- suggest how it could be solved

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You have recently bought a toy online and after receiving it you discovered a problem with it. Write a letter to the online store you bought it from and say:
- Describe the toy
- explain the problem
- suggest how it could be solved

Dear Sir/ Madam,
I am writing this letter to bring your attention and show my disillusionment on the toy which I have purchased from your toy shop online.
Let me tell you more in detail, on 23rd may I have placed my order for a toy train, I received it on 27th may. when I unsealed the box I found broken train. I placed an order for the toy tain along with its accessories including tracks. Tracks seems in complete, when I place it on the floor only two tracks I can found.Apparently,it was mentioned online that the toy will include one engine and two following compartment along with four tracks.
I would like to request you, if you could exchanged it with a perfect toy train and with its complete accessories in good working condition or you can refund the amount incase you don't have perfect toy train.
Looking forward to hearing from you.

Your faithfully,
Arti Singh

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing this letter to bring your a...
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Line 3, column 111, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
...a toy train, I received it on 27th may. when I unsealed the box I found broken train...
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Line 3, column 111, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “when” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...a toy train, I received it on 27th may. when I unsealed the box I found broken train...
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Line 3, column 320, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Apparently
...n the floor only two tracks I can found.Apparently,it was mentioned online that the toy wi...
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Line 3, column 330, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...r only two tracks I can found.Apparently,it was mentioned online that the toy will ...
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Line 3, column 410, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'compartment' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'compartments'.
Suggestion: compartments
...ll include one engine and two following compartment along with four tracks. I would like t...
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Line 4, column 43, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'exchange'
Suggestion: exchange
...would like to request you, if you could exchanged it with a perfect toy train and with it...
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Line 4, column 181, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...or you can refund the amount incase you dont have perfect toy train. Looking forwa...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, if, look, may, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.48453608247 13% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 26.3917525773 64% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 730.0 937.175257732 78% => OK
No of words: 159.0 206.0 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59119496855 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55098862472 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70307119491 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 127.690721649 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.641509433962 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 212.4 290.88556701 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.5498921638 44.8134815571 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.25 76.5299724578 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.875 16.8248392259 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.625 4.34317383033 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 7.41237113402 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309860815839 0.216113520407 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115060307845 0.0766984524023 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0895962038707 0.0603063233224 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190428299402 0.12726935374 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0625178839915 0.0580467560999 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 8.37731958763 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 70.7449484536 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 8.71597938144 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 41.2886597938 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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