You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter,•Describe the si

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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter,

• Describe the situation

• Explain your problems and why it is difficult to work

• Say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to let you know that I am unhappy with my current living conditions. While the accommodation itself is fine. My housemate has become intolerable making it almost impossible for me to work. I hope you will consider my situation favorably.

Let me explain my situation. The trouble started about three month ago when my housemate first moved in. Prior to that, everything was fine; my old housemate was extremely considerate. My current housemate however, stays up almost all night and plays incessantly loud music. As such, I have not been able to sleep properly and therefore cannot concentrate on my studies.

Would you kindly transfer me or my housemate to another room? I would much prefer to live with someone who is quieter and more considerate of others. As long as it is quiet, I don’t mind whom I live with.

Thank you for your consideration.

Yours faithfully,

Shima

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 83, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...appy with my current living conditions. While the accommodation itself is fine. My ho...
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Line 9, column 62, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...uation. The trouble started about three month ago when my housemate first moved in. P...
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Line 21, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r consideration. Yours faithfully, Shima
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Line 23, column 6, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ration. Yours faithfully, Shima
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, so, therefore, while, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 26.3917525773 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 789.0 937.175257732 84% => OK
No of words: 156.0 206.0 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05769230769 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53411884305 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86482527668 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 127.690721649 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.705128205128 0.622605031667 113% => OK
syllable_count: 242.1 290.88556701 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 16.3608247423 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.3257350761 44.8134815571 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 56.3571428571 76.5299724578 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 11.1428571429 16.8248392259 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 4.34317383033 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159347002103 0.216113520407 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572034042715 0.0766984524023 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0578187075831 0.0603063233224 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121731862485 0.12726935374 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0694659122598 0.0580467560999 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 8.37731958763 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.31 70.7449484536 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.88 8.71597938144 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 41.2886597938 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.4 8.54432989691 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.2247191011 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.25 Out of 9
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