You should spend about 20 minutes on this task You are going to another country to study You would like to do a part time job while you are studying so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help Write a letter to your friend In your letter giv

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

give details of your study plans
explain why you want to get a part-time job
suggest how your friend could help you find a job
You should write at least 150 words.

Dear Fabricio,

We do not have been talked for long time but I have checked on Facebook that you are currently living in Australia and my visa was approved by the Australia government to study English there for 6 months. As you know our situation in Brazil is very difficult and it is important that when I arrive in Australia I already have a part-time job to pay my bills.

Firstly my plan is stay in Australia studying for 6 months as I mentioned above, but I have intention to renew my visa and maybe get the residence because of all problems that are happening in Brazil lately. Furthermore you already living in Australia around 3 years and I believe that you can help me to find a job, so, I am going to arrive in Brisbane on September of this year and you can talk with some friends while I am applying for the companies from now.

Yours sincerely,

Igor Falcao

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 209, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...ms that are happening in Brazil lately. Furthermore you already living in Australia around ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 295, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help me find' instead.
Suggestion: help me find
...ound 3 years and I believe that you can help me to find a job, so, I am going to arrive in Bris...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, so, while, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 724.0 937.175257732 77% => OK
No of words: 162.0 206.0 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46913580247 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53937142911 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 127.690721649 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.635802469136 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 228.6 290.88556701 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.13402061856 33% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 12.6804123711 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 16.3608247423 196% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.334156024 44.8134815571 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.8 76.5299724578 189% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.4 16.8248392259 193% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.4 4.34317383033 286% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.29896907216 47% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294108718505 0.216113520407 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140268233806 0.0766984524023 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0935641217167 0.0603063233224 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227114387449 0.12726935374 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364607532302 0.0580467560999 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 8.37731958763 189% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 70.7449484536 79% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 7.45979381443 180% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.24 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 41.2886597938 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 8.62886597938 197% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 8.54432989691 173% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 8.15463917526 208% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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