You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:Describe the training course you want to doExplain what the company could do to he

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You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:
Describe the training course you want to do
Explain what the company could do to help you
Say how the course will be useful for your job

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to inform you upon my interest in pursuing the CFA designation. The training program mainly consists of several self-study exams in which a pass or fail is granted upon the completion of each module.Furthermore, once all my modules are awarded with a pass, I will be officially become a Certified Financial Analyst.

I've always been a hardworking employee at your organization.For instance, I always arrive on time and submit my final weekly reports on its given due dates.Therefore,I would like you to reduce my daily work hours.Thus, it would become much easier for me to complete my modules on time.

On the one hand,The course itself will help me sell Mutual Funds, Stocks, and Bonds to Investment Bankers.On the other hand, we would be earning much more money overtime.I am hoping for an approval to take the course.

Yours faithfully,
Mike Jacob
Advisor

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, for instance, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 762.0 937.175257732 81% => OK
No of words: 150.0 206.0 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08 4.54256449028 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.49963551158 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10222858961 2.54303337028 122% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.753333333333 0.622605031667 121% => OK
syllable_count: 235.8 290.88556701 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 12.6804123711 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 16.3608247423 183% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.6239285653 44.8134815571 209% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 152.4 76.5299724578 199% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0 16.8248392259 178% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.8 4.34317383033 318% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 2.54639175258 393% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211716933244 0.216113520407 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0959690023224 0.0766984524023 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0228827026546 0.0603063233224 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112559624957 0.12726935374 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0113721684913 0.0580467560999 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 8.37731958763 209% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 70.7449484536 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 7.45979381443 201% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 8.71597938144 147% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 7.59969072165 124% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 8.62886597938 214% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.0 8.54432989691 164% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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