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It is the fact that children are being targeted customers for many companies, and these advertisements have some detrimental impact on children; therefore, it is suggested that a ban should be given to these advertisements in order to tackle the related problems. In my opinion, I partly agree with this idea, since it could bring both benefits and drawbacks to society.
It is easily understandable why a number of people agree that a prohibition on advertisements could be tremendously helpful as it might alleviate the detrimental impacts of these kinds of programs on children.To begin with, the relationship between children and their parents could be affected by some advertisements. Compared to adults, children are easily attracted by commercials due to the colorful images combining with lively and catchy tunes; therefore, they are easily swayed by commercials to own the advertised items, resulting in conflicts if their parents deny their desires to have these. For example, after watching a sugar-based drink commercial, children might convince their parents to buy it, and when they are denied, they may have a negative emotion and be frustrated, leading to wrong behaviors like nagging. In addition, by being exposed to advertisements, children might be a jealous and vulnerable individual when they grow up. Since many companies have up-to-date versions, children tend to compare their products with their counterparts or develop the habit of judging someone just because of their material possessions. For example, they might seek out who has the latest toy car version, or whose clothes are most trendy.
Although that solution might make/create some aforementioned impacts, I think it would have some limitations. Firstly, Marketing is one of the major factors contributing to the growth of a company, and creates many job opportunities.Therefore, if these advertisements are banned completely, many companies would go bankrupt and many marketing employees would suffer from unemployment. This would place a great burden on the national economy since the government will have to provide financial support for those unemployed citizens. Secondly, it would be quite challenging to decide whether an advertisement is intended for children or not, so that this regulation might be impractical. For example, advertisements of some fast food are not labeled for “children”, since not only children but also adults consume a great deal of them, thus it would be impossible to prohibit these products’ advertisements.
In conclusion,while a ban on advertisements targeted at children could be helpful to tackle these problems, it still is an impractical solution.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 7.85571142285 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2273.0 1615.20841683 141% => OK
No of words: 413.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50363196126 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.36019560848 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549636803874 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 701.1 506.74238477 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.10420841683 380% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.4448909928 49.4020404114 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.357142857 106.682146367 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5 20.7667163134 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9285714286 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183101349315 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755670022718 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0819612617644 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154629530304 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046698611882 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 50.2224549098 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 78.4519038076 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 9.78957915832 204% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.7795591182 186% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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