It is important to consider whether government and its citizen should invest money on preserving wildlife or fund other pressing issues of the societies namely poverty and health care. Although some people think that it is better to have money for saving the animals, I am of the opinion that government need to allocate budget for eradicating poverty and improving basic health care system since human lives matter more than animals.
Many countries around the world are facing an enormous number of problems. One of the most obvious challenges is poverty. According to a united nation’s report, more than half of the people in this world are living below the poverty line. This means that either they have no access or limited access to food, water, shelter or clothing. In such miserable situation, it is illogical and insensible to spend money for animals, while impoverished and destitute people are disenfranchised of their basic life necessities. This action not only brings about depression and hopelessness in the society but also compels poor people to commit criminal offences and sometimes suicide. For instance, recently in a slump of Bangladesh, a disheartened father tried to take off his life when his 2 year old children asked him for food after remaining in starvation for three days straight. If the government had invested money in this sector earlier, then this incidence would have never happened.
Moreover, poverty gives birth to several other problems such as pollution, which is hazardous for both the environment and other living beings. In other words, if people cannot take care of themselves because of poverty, it is preposterous to think that they will care for the wildlife and their habitats. Due to poverty, insufficient sanitary facilities and improper sewerage infrastructure in developing countries, rivers and oceans are polluted to the point that they are no longer inhabitable for aquatic biodiversity. A recent study revealed that, a variety of fish population has been reduced to almost half in the Indus River, owing to industrial and residential waste being dumped into the river. Therefore, it is crucial to allocate funds for the development of such infrastructures, which not only improves people’s lives, but also saves other species and their habitats.
To conclude, while other people may vary in their opinion, I think that government should subsidize the alarming problems in our community such as poverty and its related problems rather than on the matters that are merely the result of the above mentioned factors.
- The government should reduce the amount of money spent on local environmental problems and instead increase funding into urgent and more threatening issues such as global warming To what extent do you agree 92
- The population of most cities is growing as people move to cities to find work and new opportunities What problems does overpopulation in cities cause How can these problems be solved 92
- Both government and individuals are spending too much money protecting animals and their habitat This money should be better spent dealing with fundamental issues in society such as poverty and health care To what extent do you agree 89
- In some countries a few people earn extremely high salaries Some people think that this is good for a country while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn Discuss both views and give your opinion 95
- Both governments and individuals are spending vast amount of money protecting animals and their habitats This money could be better spent dealing with fundamental issues in sociely such as poverty and health care To what extent do you agree 92
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...saves other species and their habitats. To conclude, while other people may vary...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, i think, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2172.0 1615.20841683 134% => OK
No of words: 413.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25907990315 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78532044026 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 176.041082164 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581113801453 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 506.74238477 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.4494640159 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.75 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8125 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.9879759519 326% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169223607738 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0546210695956 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500919153219 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107133445962 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045961271645 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 78.4519038076 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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