Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and
commercial perspectives.
What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce
these pressures?
It is commonly said that today’s children are pressurized as were yesterday’s adults.
That’s true in the sense that children are facing harder and harder academic, social and
commercial challenges. It is happening simply because of the ever increasing demands
of life, from the same perspectives, on humans in general. While it is important that
children excel in their age to become successful as adults, they must be shielded from
the mounting pressure by maintaining a balance between material and psychological
growth.
As the global village becomes more and more competitive everyday, it becomes
important for us to prepare for the fight, so to speak, earlier and earlier. This is realized
by all, which triggers societies to push their juveniles during their learning stage.
The other thing that is contributing to this ever rising pressure on children is the lack
institutional opportunities, especially in developing countries. Now, more than ever,
children are having to race each other for reaching the privilege of higher education.
While healthy competition is helpful for the psycho-social development of young ones,
it is rather unhealthy when the race becomes more prominent than the objective. Of
course the objective of children competing against each other ideally is brining the best
out of themselves. But, very frequently, a child is compelled to compete for becoming
better than the other. In other words, the competition becomes a brawl rather than being
a sprint.
To stop such spiteful struggle among our young, we must first establish a sense of
camaraderie within all our developmental institutions, such as schools and colleges.
Students must contest for academic betterment, not social supremacy. Also, parents
should get proactively involved in promoting sportsmanship among learners. They must
not allow vile aggressiveness and their own vengefulness in the lives of their children.
To sustain such social reformation the government must establish ample alternatives to
the traditional route to success.
The conclusion here is simple. The children today are being put into a ‘survival-of-the-
fittest’ situation much earlier than they must be when they should really be trying to do
their best. Such untimely loss of innocence is only going to make civilization more
antagonistic. Therefore we must ensure that personal development may be ushered in
harmony and not in vile rivalry
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 89, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g harder and harder academic, social and commercial challenges. It is happening s...
^^^
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...y because of the ever increasing demands of life, from the same perspectives, on ...
^^^
Line 4, column 86, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s in general. While it is important that children excel in their age to become su...
^^^
Line 5, column 87, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ul as adults, they must be shielded from the mounting pressure by maintaining a b...
^^^
Line 6, column 82, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lance between material and psychological growth. As the global village becomes m...
^^^
Line 8, column 57, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...llage becomes more and more competitive everyday, it becomes important for us to prepa...
^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 77, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd more competitive everyday, it becomes important for us to prepare for the figh...
^^^
Line 9, column 94, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...k, earlier and earlier. This is realized by all, which triggers societies to push...
^^^
Line 11, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... rising pressure on children is the lack institutional opportunities, especially ...
^^^
Line 12, column 86, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...veloping countries. Now, more than ever, children are having to race each other f...
^^^
Line 14, column 86, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...psycho-social development of young ones, it is rather unhealthy when the race bec...
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Line 15, column 83, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es more prominent than the objective. Of course the objective of children competi...
^^^
Line 16, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t each other ideally is brining the best out of themselves. But, very frequently,...
^^^
Line 17, column 86, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ild is compelled to compete for becoming better than the other. In other words, t...
^^^
Line 18, column 89, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tition becomes a brawl rather than being a sprint. To stop such spiteful struggl...
^^^
Line 20, column 83, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oung, we must first establish a sense of camaraderie within all our developmental...
^^^
Line 22, column 83, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ent, not social supremacy. Also, parents should get proactively involved in promo...
^^^
Line 23, column 85, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... sportsmanship among learners. They must not allow vile aggressiveness and their ...
^^^
Line 25, column 87, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ent must establish ample alternatives to the traditional route to success. The c...
^^^
Line 28, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... when they should really be trying to do their best. Such untimely loss of innoce...
^^^
Line 29, column 84, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is only going to make civilization more antagonistic. Therefore we must ensure t...
^^^
Line 30, column 15, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... make civilization more antagonistic. Therefore we must ensure that personal developmen...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 30, column 83, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t personal development may be ushered in harmony and not in vile rivalry
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, so, therefore, while, in general, such as, in other words, so to speak
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 376.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59840425532 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1082393444 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577127659574 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.5255161635 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.238095238 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9047619048 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 29.0 4.38176352705 662% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 23.0 5.01903807615 458% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170157891412 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483402230755 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437917786235 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0417216796886 0.151304729494 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397932510663 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.9 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 89, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g harder and harder academic, social and commercial challenges. It is happening s...
^^^
Line 3, column 85, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y because of the ever increasing demands of life, from the same perspectives, on ...
^^^
Line 4, column 86, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s in general. While it is important that children excel in their age to become su...
^^^
Line 5, column 87, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ul as adults, they must be shielded from the mounting pressure by maintaining a b...
^^^
Line 6, column 82, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lance between material and psychological growth. As the global village becomes m...
^^^
Line 8, column 57, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...llage becomes more and more competitive everyday, it becomes important for us to prepa...
^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 77, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd more competitive everyday, it becomes important for us to prepare for the figh...
^^^
Line 9, column 94, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...k, earlier and earlier. This is realized by all, which triggers societies to push...
^^^
Line 11, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... rising pressure on children is the lack institutional opportunities, especially ...
^^^
Line 12, column 86, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...veloping countries. Now, more than ever, children are having to race each other f...
^^^
Line 14, column 86, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...psycho-social development of young ones, it is rather unhealthy when the race bec...
^^^
Line 15, column 83, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es more prominent than the objective. Of course the objective of children competi...
^^^
Line 16, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t each other ideally is brining the best out of themselves. But, very frequently,...
^^^
Line 17, column 86, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ild is compelled to compete for becoming better than the other. In other words, t...
^^^
Line 18, column 89, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tition becomes a brawl rather than being a sprint. To stop such spiteful struggl...
^^^
Line 20, column 83, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oung, we must first establish a sense of camaraderie within all our developmental...
^^^
Line 22, column 83, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ent, not social supremacy. Also, parents should get proactively involved in promo...
^^^
Line 23, column 85, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... sportsmanship among learners. They must not allow vile aggressiveness and their ...
^^^
Line 25, column 87, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ent must establish ample alternatives to the traditional route to success. The c...
^^^
Line 28, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... when they should really be trying to do their best. Such untimely loss of innoce...
^^^
Line 29, column 84, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is only going to make civilization more antagonistic. Therefore we must ensure t...
^^^
Line 30, column 15, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... make civilization more antagonistic. Therefore we must ensure that personal developmen...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 30, column 83, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t personal development may be ushered in harmony and not in vile rivalry
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, so, therefore, while, in general, such as, in other words, so to speak
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 376.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59840425532 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1082393444 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577127659574 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.5255161635 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.238095238 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9047619048 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 29.0 4.38176352705 662% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 23.0 5.01903807615 458% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170157891412 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483402230755 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437917786235 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0417216796886 0.151304729494 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397932510663 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.9 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.