Children can learn effectively from watching TV. Therefore, they should be encouraged to watch TV regularly both at home and at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Children can learn effectively from watching TV. Therefore, they should be encouraged to watch TV regularly both at home and at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Given that watching TV is an effective channel for children to acquire knowledge, children as the audiences and learners should be encouraged to watch TV no matter they are at home or at school. However, I disagree with such statement.

There are several reasons why I oppose encouraging children to watch TV regularly. In terms of school, first, it cannot help them make progress and get great grades in study. Although children could expand the scope of knowledge through watching different contents of programs, the knowledge they acquire on TV is irrelevant to their curriculum and exams. In addition, children lack time to watch TV at school. They stay at school about six hours a day and their school life are occupied by various courses. Even though they are allowed to do this, they will argue about which programs to watch, increasing the difficulty of teacher’s management.

As for encouraging them to watch TV at home, this is absurd, since it begets unexpected downsides on their growth. Directly, unlike in school, children without enough supervision and adequate self-discipline will spend more time than what has been originally set. Gradually, addition to screen might be developed, alluring them to be immersed in TV program, with tons of precious time wasted which should be distributed to do other more meaningful things, such as study、physical exercise.

In conclusion, it is a strange encouragement, and from what I have discussed, I see no reason behind to encourage them to watch.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 346, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...veloped, alluring them to be immersed in TV program, with tons of precious time w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, as for, in addition, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1280.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 246.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20325203252 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96035189615 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96992882561 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.617886178862 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 373.5 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2250326571 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.666666667 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.474139260414 0.244688304435 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170701998532 0.084324248473 202% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126876051945 0.0667982634062 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290905955914 0.151304729494 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121672300997 0.056905535591 214% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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