Electronic gadgets like computer and video games are becoming much popular that children nowadays usually spend most of their time on them. It is believed that in spite of spending all day on the electronic devices by the young ones they must be boosted up to spend a few hours on outdoor activities. I strongly agree with the notion and would like to elaborate on my views in the below paragraphs.
To begin with, due to the advancements of technology like computers and smartphones, people are becoming more dependent on them especially children. Although, these devices have a number of advantages in the current pandemic situations. For instance, students attend online classes using laptops and smartphones. They get their curriculum, circular, daily activities list on their smartphones only. Even teachers are finding it useful in the COVID-19 situation because it makes an easy for them to teach the children without hampering their education.
To continue with, on the other side,it has some demerits also. However, these devices have benefits but while using them students do not get interested in indulging in outdoor games. They are getting habitual of all these gadgets. After the study, they spend most of their day on games instead of going outside and have some physical activities. Consequently, it is affecting their health. By this, they may suffer from a health issue like obesity which further gives birth to other diseases. As well as, long time facing the screen affects their vision. So it is necessary for the students to participate in outdoor activities as it makes them fit.
To conclude, in spite of having lots of advantages of these devices, children must balance their life simultaneously between outdoor games and gadgets. They must not make themselves dependent on them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, may, so, well, while, for instance, as well as, in spite of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1520.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17006802721 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71120654629 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581632653061 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.1448263566 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.4444444444 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3333333333 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198597576576 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057309294071 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511459805542 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123587976443 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0683430574832 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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