The dangers and complexities of the modern world have made the mobile phone an absolute necessity for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Following the increase of social instabilities and crime rates, parents do not only worry about the safety of kids, but also seek the method to contact young children at any moment to reduce anxieties. On this matter, some sets of people argue that using a smartphone is the safest way to keep children, however, others believe that there are way more disadvantages itself. I personally agree with the latter opinion and will explain the reasons.
Admittedly, I partly agree that allowing cell phones to children can increase the level of safety. More specifically, we are in a society that criminals have been jumped and the level of crime has been worse than before. In this regard, if a kid carries a cell phone, then they easily contact to parents or 911 to ask for help in certain emergency situations, Apart from the safety matters, another reason worth mentioning is that connects are crucial issues among young generations, for instance, they prefer to connect with the world, or other pupils through the social networks. As a result, a smartphone plays a pivotal role in relationships in the modern world, compared to the usages of calls in parent's generations.
Nevertheless, I, as one of the opponents of this view, hardly accept the idea they every child should keep a phone. In the first place, as far as the function of the smartphone is considered, It offers a bunch of information, and some of the data I might harmful effects on children, such as violent or sexual contents. From the perspective of children, they are not mature enough to distinguish right from wrong, thus, when they give negative information, the contents will stimulate young kids' curiosity and it will lead to mimic the actions, including copycat crimes. Additionally, the purpose of using smartphones can be satisfied by other alternative choices, for example, a smart watch that offers limited functions and only informs the location of children if the person who has the authority is asked for.
In conclusion, although being aware of the benefits that using cell phones will bring, I disagree with the idea since the children's development and other possible options. As a result, the usage of phones should be banned from children by parents who have responsibilities to take care of them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 230, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, so, then, thus, apart from, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1903.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 382.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98167539267 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77543336158 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568062827225 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.8910846244 49.4020404114 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.384615385 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3846153846 20.7667163134 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9230769231 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161248407684 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0570112230895 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0299021229897 0.0667982634062 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0984715672426 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300287164809 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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