Get rid of old things to get the newest fashion and the latest technology. Do the disadvantages of a throwaway society outweigh the advantages?
Some others proposed that the elimination of all obsolete things which need to concern. That is irrefutable that many countries are prompting consumerism about how could to abundant in the budget towards the development of the nation, thereby, encouraging the sell to fashionable trends or are up-to-date technologies advance. Looking from an overall perspective, this seems to get more disadvantages outstrips benefits.
Concerning the environmental matters, it is not denied that is updating the newly commodities are harmful to our lives, is meant that stretch to mass production which is satisfied to own desires. Indeed, Apple is one of the world’s largest technology companies, each year, they always are updating models, and is launching to the market simultaneously. What problem is that many users will have been thrown away the millions of old technologies. As it leads, they could have not been gathered to generate to other devices so that this definitely is a threat to the ecosystems. Or other companies about consumer goods, the label or package are designed to appealing to many people who those are chosen their products. Nevertheless, it is not decomposed and will be put into outer space such as rivers, empty land.
On the other hand, the abuse of the newest commodities is fairly affecting our societies. It indicates that need a stable income that allowed them to afford these products. It causes to they are turning into workaholic by anyway about how are possessed it. And even that those who are becoming an offender so that they just have things that they expected. Eventually, certainly, that is not for evolving of our community.
In conclusion, according to the conditions, they should be giving into the right decisions in which purchasing products in our lives. Furthermore, consumerism has both flaws and merits, however, it will behave in another way to rectifying this problem.
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- The diagram details the process of making clothes from plastic bottles Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
- Young people are often influenced by peer pressure Do the disadvantages outweigh the advantages 73
- The diagram shows rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 89
- The diagrams give information about changes in a student accommodation 84
- The diagrams show how the layout of a school library changed 72
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 279, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are always
...t technology companies, each year, they always are updating models, and is launching to th...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, furthermore, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1613.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22006472492 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93538033729 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595469255663 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7897431758 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.8125 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3125 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.079687744906 0.244688304435 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0224678415173 0.084324248473 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0318818255051 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.047518980851 0.151304729494 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495226503093 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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