The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?
Many argue that allocating more budget to public service is more profitable than funding the creative sectors. I disagree as a creative economy improves population well-being and preserves cultural heritage.
The improvement of citizens’ well-being is the primary reason the government needs to invest more in the creative industry as it helps people regulate their emotions better. While people can flow their emotions, it straightly improves their physical well-being as they would feel relief channeling what they feel through arts. A study suggests that workers in Jakarta who watched traditional concerts twice a year experienced less anxiety than those who had never attended concerts. Moreover, the concert was free from fees as the government of Jakarta provided it. Thus, enjoying free concerts helps workers to maintain their mental health condition.
Funding more creative fields can also be cultural perseverance act coming from the authority, securing cultural heritage from extinction. To put it more simply, more budget can be spent to hold numerous events to increase the cultural awareness of the young generation through youth activities. This can engage them to dive deeper into their culture. As proven by PRJ, an event held to celebrate the birthday of Jakarta, successfully introduced Kerak Telor as one of the Batavia tribe's traditional feasts for generations. Statistically shows that 70% of PRJ visitors from year to year were the youth as they know that many of their favorite singers would perform freely in that event.
To conclude, it is disagreed that funding creative industries would be pointless compared to allocating budget to public sectors since it supports people’s mental health and preserves cultural heritage. If possible, both expenses should be distributed evenly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1539.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53597122302 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76897353362 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60071942446 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4346918608 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.928571429 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 7.06120827912 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0774841275007 0.244688304435 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0290188271737 0.084324248473 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0327935818463 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0504352773853 0.151304729494 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0193149832273 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.75 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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