Hello, I'm Jessica and this is my writing to prepare for IELTS test. I know, It has many faults. i hope that i will receive from you. Thank you
Topic: Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is place to learn this.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
In order to a child can develop a way total, the education is important things. It depends on not only parents' teaching but also learning in school. So, I disagree that each parents can not be to teach children how to become a good person of society.
The family is the best important basic to establish children' s personality soon. Nobody else, the parent are who teach them the rules, respect, obey adults and a little things. There are many activities, words from parents can be affected to children. If the parents give many rules well, the children can be absorbed its easily.
Beside, learning to understand about life, the value system of whole society, it can not achieved just in the home. When coming school, the children do on the other hand study knowledge widely from books, there are many skills needed. They will live, work and contact with many people types, this experient motivate them how to co-operate and be clever in other relationship.
In conclusion, There are many things to help a children to be good people in many areas. The role of parents is important but it is not all. And education in school is necessary spacial for the development of children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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In order to a child can develop a way to...
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...ow to become a good person of society. The family is the best important basic t...
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...ules, respect, obey adults and a little things. There are many activities, words from ...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ules well, the children can be absorbed its easily. Beside, learning to und...
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...e children can be absorbed its easily. Beside, learning to understand about lif...
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Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'achieve'
Suggestion: achieve
...lue system of whole society, it can not achieved just in the home. When coming school, t...
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...e and be clever in other relationship. In conclusion, There are many things to ...
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...nclusion, There are many things to help a children to be good people in many areas. The r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 976.0 1615.20841683 60% => OK
No of words: 206.0 315.596192385 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73786407767 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78849575616 4.20363070211 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48932114566 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 176.041082164 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582524271845 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 305.1 506.74238477 60% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.9936960746 49.4020404114 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.0769230769 106.682146367 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8461538462 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38461538462 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239321374755 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0875371257241 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611241086051 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153513669824 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0194811587691 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.0946893788 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 78.4519038076 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.