It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Some individuals attach great importance in putting themselves at risk not only in their careers but also in their day-to-day lives. From my perspective, although there are some potential drawbacks and threats of taking risks, I firmly believe that they pale in comparison to the benefits that people can derive from facing up with dangers.
On the first hand, avoiding risks from works and life can offer some advantages, chief of which is the perpetuation of one's occupations as well as the daily well-being. In fact, if they failed to complete such important tasks which might pose some detrimental effects on a particular organization, there is a high possibility that they will lose their professional careers. Furthermore, the mentioned dangerous actions would affect disadvantageously to the community. By way of illustration, in a business competition between large and famous entrepreneurs, only a tiny mistake of a businessman could lead to the victory of other investors. Consequently, this failure can put the economy of a company at risk of being eliminated or bankrupted. In other words, taking risks in crucial occasions, in which they are not aware of how serious the results are, may impact deleteriously to the well-being of some individuals.
On the other hand, I lean toward the opinion that human should experience several risky challenges so as to improve their professional level in the future. As a matter of fact, by registering many failures in ordinary lives, people might acquire some necessary skills and knowledge that support them to the ultimate success. Take the example of several chemists in the past, they had carried out thousands of experiments with a host of dangers from the noxious chemicals. However, that scientists still desired to dedicate their life and time to the inventions of a wide range of useful applications that we utilize them in our everyday life such as the unbreakable glass for houses or vehicles. Therefore, those people who took risks to improve the living standard of the citizens gained widely admiration across the globe. Hence, not being worried to try out dangerous experiments is the chances to enhance our way of living.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are some disadvantages of taking risks in professional careers as well as personal lives, I strongly hold the view that the benefits that we can obtain from this trend is far much greater than the feasible drawbacks.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 120, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
..., chief of which is the perpetuation of ones occupations as well as the daily well-b...
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Line 3, column 100, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...uld experience several risky challenges so as to improve their professional level in the...
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Line 3, column 729, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'risks improving'.
Suggestion: risks improving
...icles. Therefore, those people who took risks to improve the living standard of the citizens gai...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, as to, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact, as well as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 41.998997996 162% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2055.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 399.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15037593985 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99401731332 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573934837093 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.8667635658 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.0 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.6 7.06120827912 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216481431025 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633298492457 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387067400956 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132507320651 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.018532733744 0.056905535591 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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