It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?
There is a saying ‘Without risk you cannot promote neither in your private life nor in professional life’. According to some if a person wants to extend his/her life he/she should take risks. In my opinion, this challenge has more advantages for people who want to change their lives.
On the one hand, although taking risks have more financial and emotional benefits in your private life it has a lot of dangerous results if you cannot do it. getting married is a big risk and challenge in every young life person. It is important who is your wife because you want share your private life with him. Most of people think it is the most important taking risks in whole of a person’s life. If it is a successful marriage, they will have a happy life but if they have a lot of argues with each other unfortunately they get divorced. In these situations, they spend a depression period and sometimes end to suicide. Getting risk is a double-edged sword if you fail in your risk loss everything that you have but if you win you can have anything.
On the other hand, people should take risks in their professional lives if they want to get promoted and improve their skills, knowledge and so on. Therefore, it is important do somethings which other people either cannot do that or don’t have tendency because of their fear. For example, there are fewer people who work underwater with argon gas because it is very dangerous and harm your body in long-term period but its salary and experience are awesome. Some professionals who work there get asthma and infectious diseases after 10 years. But at that time, it can give you a wonderful sense and a very good experience. Then when you retired can give young generation who want select this career in the future.
In conclusion, some people do not like to take risks anymore and they want to continue their boring daily lives solely. Not only is taking risks necessary in both private and professional life because enhances your quality and reveals your abilities but also, you have become a knowledgeable person who has lots of experience.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 314, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the people') or simply say ''Most people''.
Suggestion: Most of the people; Most people
... want share your private life with him. Most of people think it is the most important taking r...
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Line 4, column 327, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...able person who has lots of experience.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 24.0651302605 208% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 366.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72677595628 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57738194063 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486338797814 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 551.7 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7843131602 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1111111111 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377485185044 0.244688304435 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124219659967 0.084324248473 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103114783012 0.0667982634062 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261133194694 0.151304729494 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585381252314 0.056905535591 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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