It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?
There is a saying ‘Without risk you cannot promote neither in your private life nor in professional life’. According to some if a person wants to extend his/her life he/she should take risks. In my opinion, this challenge has more advantages for people who want to change their lives.
On the one hand, although taking risks have more financial and emotional benefits in your private life it has a lot of dangerous results if you cannot do it. getting married is a big risk and challenge in every young life person. It is important who is your wife because you want share your private life with him. Most of people think it is the most important taking risks in whole of a person life. If it is a successful marriage, they will have a happy life but if they have a lot of argues with each other unfortunately they get divorced which has harmful effect on both the boy and the girl. In these situations, they spend a depression period and sometimes end to suicide. Getting risk is a double-edged sword if you fail in your risk loss everything that you have but if you win you can have anything.
On the other hand, people should take risks in their professional lives if they want to get promoted and improve their skills, knowledge and so on. Therefore, it is important do somethings which other people either cannot do that or don’t have tendency because of their fear. For example, there are fewer people who work underwater with argon gas because it is very dangerous and harm your body in long-term period but its salary and experience are awesome. Many of people don’t accept this type of jobs as they like their life and body. Some professionals who work there get asthma and infectious diseases after 10 years. But at that time, it can give you a wonderful sense and a very good experience. Then when you retired can give young generation who want select this career in the future.
In conclusion, some people do not like to take risks anymore and they want to continue their boring daily lives. Not only is taking risks necessary in both private and professional life because enhances your quality and reveals your abilities but also, you have become a knowledgeable person who has lots of experience and can consult with other people who want to choose this way.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 314, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the people') or simply say ''Most people''.
Suggestion: Most of the people; Most people
... want share your private life with him. Most of people think it is the most important taking r...
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Line 4, column 382, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...her people who want to choose this way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 24.0651302605 224% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 404.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65594059406 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4743797984 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467821782178 0.561755894193 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 595.8 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0749576639 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2631578947 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05263157895 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360716980378 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118917829633 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0928384897702 0.0667982634062 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244115048823 0.151304729494 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273297010477 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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