It is more important to spend public money on promoting healthy lifestyle to prevent illness than to spend it on of the treatment of those who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There has been a matter of concern among people over whether financial budget should be spent on preventing illness through making a healthy lifestyle plan and not using it as a treatment fee for already ill people. In my opinion, I totally agree with this idea due to some following reasons.
First of all, a good lifestyle and a healthy body is the fundamental condition for efficient work and study. In particular, individuals who often go to the fitness center, play a sport in their leisure time and have a balanced diet are healthier than ones who struggle with their busy timetable. Therefore, a sporty person can have a well-built body which brings many benefits to their productivity. On the other hand, busy people who do not spend their efforts on planning a healthy lifestyle may not be aware of health risks. When they figure out their health problems, it is too late to have a good enough treatment, thus they cannot overcome their diseases and pass away, which are very regrettable for both them and their families.
There is another reason advocating this idea is money spending on preventing is cheaper than cure. Indeed, the cost for an annual general check is negligible in comparison with their counterpart for treatment of various dangerous diseases. As a result, people who usually spend a small amount of money on going to the hospital for checking are still healthy and vigorous. By contrast, people who detect their ill recently have to spend a huge amount of money on treatment which may not bring any good results.
In conclusion, before too late to have a treatment, I believe that people should pay attention to their health and have a good lifestyle at first for good physical strength and economical purposes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, in particular, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1455.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89898989899 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61405259729 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569023569024 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6744396222 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.25 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5833333333 7.06120827912 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223361876434 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0913256360896 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724655309918 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139324210023 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.074301587472 0.056905535591 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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