It is more important to spend public money promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?.
It is argued that state budget should be allocated to circulate a healthy lifestyle for illness-prevention rather than to treat the people who are already in diseases. I partially agree with that statement. In my opinion, the government should balance the budget on the promotion of healthy lifestyle and the illness treatment.
The disbursement on circulation of a healthy lifestyle could benefit citizens in terms of disease prevention. In details, the money spent on running campaigns that encourage people to live in an active style of living could enhance people’s health in many ways. For example, doing exercises regularly could improve blood’s molecules moving to other parts of the body and to keep fit. In order to prevent diabetes, high cholesterol-related diseases such as heart attack and stroke, people should follow a healthy routine called eating clean with special nutrition such as vegetables, good-carbohydrates foods and no junk foods.
The expenditure on treatment will help to expand life expectancy and save lives of people. When people caught diseases, if there is no appropriate treatment applied to them, they can die in a very pitiful way. For example, cancer is a fatal disease that causes about 1 million deaths in Vietnam per year. The fee for cancer’s medication and surgery is so high that many families are unable to cover such fee. As a result, a part of state budget and a wide variety of social funds, such as CANCER fighter, The Pink or WeHere, are spent to support cancer patients in treatment. Actually, ảound 100 patients were cured of U lympho cancer by receiving financial support from the state and WeHere, a social fund for cancer patients.
In conclusion, it seems to me that public money distributed on promoting an active lifestyle should be equal to that on medical care for people in diseases.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 190, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an active style" with adverb for "active"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...campaigns that encourage people to live in an active style of living could enhance people's h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, so, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1567.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15460526316 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99748675602 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588815789474 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9791989349 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.928571429 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7142857143 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203624784498 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692482015653 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737513684959 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142740469635 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0984549326075 0.056905535591 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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