It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media. Do you agree that this is the main cause of juvenile crime? What solutions can you offer to deal with this situation?
In this age of cutting-edge technology, media has gradually influenced every aspect of our life, particularly in terms of children’s mind. There exists some schools of thought that violence in the media leads to the increase in juvenile crime. From my perspective, I totally agree that this is the prime cause of juvenile delinquency. Thus, pragmatic solutions should be taken as soon as possible to mitigate this phenomenon.
Admittedly, brutal contents in many kinds of media platforms are the major reason for juvenile crimes. The reason for this are violent games or videos including bloody scenes and great physical torment might exert negative implications on children’s cognitive development. Take a prime example of this is the addiction to computer games of Vietnamese children, especially violent games. Since many young people can immerse themselve in a virtual world where any aggressive actions are rewarded, they take it for granted. Therefore, children are inclined to develop aggressive and rowdy behaviors, or seriously willing to resort to violence and commit heinous crimes to satisfy their demands.
In the face of the escalating juvenile crime rates, there is plenty of room for practical solutions. First and foremost, the government should take action in the assessment of any social media, thus it would significantly decrease the amount of violent or inappropriate content. Besides, parents need to spend more time with their children. With parental care and supervision, young people can comprehensively develop both physically and mentally without being involved in any over-aggressive activities
In conclusion, violence in the media is considered a main reason for the increase in juvenile crime due to the pernicious effects being done to children’s development. As a consequence, different down-to-earth measures must be taken for the alleviation of this problem, which are the government's action and parents’ monitor.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 285, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...eviation of this problem, which are the governments action and parents’ monitor.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1669.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.60067114094 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09221405425 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607382550336 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.320466797 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.214285714 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 7.06120827912 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290615569655 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.097559084124 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746172569278 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185495254636 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0766747405781 0.056905535591 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.2 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.92 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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