It is true that playing video games on mobile phones is detrimental not only for individuals but also for the communities. While this trend brings numerous drawbacks, I believe that the benefits of playing electronic games cannot be overlooked.
On the one hand, it is undeniable that spending a large amount of time on smartphones playing games leads to some problems. In terms of health, teenagers can take risks of obesity due to a sedentary lifestyle. In addition to physical health, mental problems such as depression or stress can be affected because of lacking communication with other people. From the perspective of society, the young generation finds such video games addictive and difficult to give up. As a result, they tend to disregard important things in their lives. Concerning study, for example, students would find it hard to concentrate on learning, which results in low marks in school.
On the other hand, apart from the practical disadvantages express above, I would argue that several games are beneficial to some extent. Firstly, it is obvious that playing games help people relieve stress after a hard-working day. It is considered one of the most useful and inexpensive way to unwind. Secondly, the youth could improve their flexibility through some video games requiring people to respond quickly by combining both eyes and hands simultaneously. Besides, people can boost their intelligence by some games such as a check that desires people to think thoroughly before making a final decision.
In conclusion, whereas other people think that it is unmerited for both individuals and society when playing games on portable devices, it seems to me that the advantages could not be underestimated.
It is true that playing video games on mobile phones is detrimental not only for individuals but also for the communities. While this trend brings numerous drawbacks, I believe that the benefits of playing electronic games cannot be overlooked.
On the one hand, it is undeniable that spending a large amount of time on smartphones playing games leads to some problems. In terms of health, teenagers can take risks of obesity due to a sedentary lifestyle. In addition to physical health, mental problems such as depression or stress can be affected because of lacking communication with other people. From the perspective of society, the young generation finds such video games addictive and difficult to give up. As a result, they tend to disregard important things in their lives. Concerning study, for example, students would find it hard to concentrate on learning, which results in low marks in school.
On the other hand, apart from the practical disadvantages express above, I would argue that several games are beneficial to some extent. Firstly, it is obvious that playing games help people relieve stress after a hard-working day. It is considered one of the most useful and inexpensive way to unwind. Secondly, the youth could improve their flexibility through some video games requiring people to respond quickly by combining both eyes and hands simultaneously. Besides, people can boost their intelligence by some games such as a check that desires people to think thoroughly before making a final decision.
In conclusion, whereas other people think that it is unmerited for both individuals and society when playing games on portable devices, it seems to me that the advantages could not be underestimated.
- People have different views about factors leading to people s achievements While I agree that material wealth and physical appearance are essential I believe that diligence and persistence are more significant On the one hand it is no doubt true that mone 89
- It is true that playing video games on mobile phones is detrimental not only for individuals but also for the communities While this trend brings numerous drawbacks I believe that the benefits of playing electronic games cannot be overlooked On the one ha 67
- It is widely believed that national authority should raise the price of petrol to address environmental issues I strongly disagree with this idea because there are various other effective solutions It is unreasonable to raise taxes on petrol in order to m 61
- The line graph illustrates the amount of money which is received by rice exports from Thailand and Vietnam during the period from 2012 to 2015 It is evident that the prices of rice exports decreased tremendously from 2012 to 2015 Meanwhile the cost remain 78
- It is justified that government money should be spent on arts Others believe that governments should focus on health care and education Discuss both views and give your opinion 89
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, whereas, while, apart from, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1448.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2274368231 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90975625049 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602888086643 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4179740655 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.428571429 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7857142857 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.4285714286 7.06120827912 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.391136641642 0.244688304435 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128945305133 0.084324248473 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.170575334096 0.0667982634062 255% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.29985117466 0.151304729494 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.285649518701 0.056905535591 502% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.